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BBeezussWrites replied to the thread Offering feedback on the first chapter of your story (No Smut).I’ve been slacking super hard and didn’t get around to this as quickly as I should’ve, so I’m sorry about that. I want to start this off...
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BBeezussWrites reacted to Bane89's post in the thread Got 10 Minutes? I’d Love Your Feedback with
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Hello, thank you so much for taking the time to read through my story, I really appreciate the detailed feedback. I’m glad the... -
BBeezussWrites replied to the thread Got 10 Minutes? I’d Love Your Feedback.Read through it and I'll just give you a brief touch on each of your points: Characterization - Obviously the strongest aspect. Not...
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BBeezussWrites reacted to JayMark's post in the thread Feedbag Thread For Indie Writers of Original Fictions [Closed Till I Catch Up] with Like.
🐂Can You Try Something Other Than Dialogue?🐂 Overall First Impresion: It's bad with charm. This could be cringe read for a laugh...
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BBeezussWrites replied to the thread Offering feedback on the first chapter of your story (No Smut).Work's been killing me so all of these are taking longer than they usually should. Hope I didn't take too long to get this to you boss...
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BBeezussWrites reacted to sleepandeatallday's post in the thread Offering feedback on the first chapter of your story (No Smut) with Like.
hi, are you still doing this? I would love some feedback on my story https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2199836/street-no-/
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BBeezussWrites replied to the thread Offering feedback on the first chapter of your story (No Smut).This story has a ton of passion behind it, and it reminds me a ton of those stories I used to think up when I fell asleep, which is what...
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BBeezussWrites replied to the thread I just noticed I made a ridiculous mistake.Not exactly published, but when I finished my first 90k word novel, I sent it into a beta reader because I was too excited and knew...
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BBeezussWrites replied to the thread Offering feedback on the first chapter of your story (No Smut).Going to start by saying that pretty much all of my comments will be formatted to fit my taste as a reader, not the overall health of...
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BBeezussWrites replied to the thread How do I stop writing (I) in my first-person POV novel..Most readers expect to see “I” used a ton in a first person story, so don’t ever beat yourself up if you see it a few dozen times in a...
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BBeezussWrites replied to the thread Offering feedback on the first chapter of your story (No Smut).Before I start, I want to say that this shift from 600 word stories to a 7k word chapter was an undertaking for me. As such, a ton of my...
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BBeezussWrites replied to the thread Offering feedback on the first chapter of your story (No Smut).Concept wise, I really like this story. You have a unique voice that makes me question if I was misunderstanding the story, or if you...
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BBeezussWrites replied to the thread Offering feedback on the first chapter of your story (No Smut).Before I start, I just want to let you know that I myself am a bit too old for YA stories, so I’ll say that what I’m sending you is not...
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BBeezussWrites reacted to c37's post in the thread Offering feedback on the first chapter of your story (No Smut) with Like.
I wouldn't call it climbing? More like they were scaling a huge wall with their wings, and took short breaks in between using nails and...
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BBeezussWrites replied to the thread Offering feedback on the first chapter of your story (No Smut).That's actually my fault, and I should've known based on the fact that you straight up said fly at one point (not sure how I missed...