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Yes. So I stopped dreaming.
Some dreams are just not worth it. Not if it cost you your will to live. It stopped being a dream and become a nightmare.
 

Hans.Trondheim

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Some dreams are just not worth it. Not if it cost you your will to live. It stopped being a dream and become a nightmare.
That's why I stopped.
your writing is fine. youre just stubborn
"Fine" but when I show it to people, they ask "why use this word?" "What kind sentence construction is this?"
 

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That's why I stopped.

"Fine" but when I show it to people, they ask "why use this word?" "What kind sentence construction is this?"
Show it to blob and he will ask the same thing. Just the average internet users behavior.

Nothing to worry about.
 

Hans.Trondheim

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thats normal
My story stats aren't. So I thought of fixing the problem. Problem is, I'm lost at what to do because I was given conflicting fixes. Researching for it gave me same results.
Show it to blob and he will ask the same thing. Just the average internet users behavior.
I think he saw it already. He gave me a few pointers.

But in any case, I'm being helped by @Bimbanana with the edits right now. I'll just finish this then think of my options from there.

I don't think I'll continue with writing. I suffered enough, and wasted time and resources for nothing.
 

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My story stats aren't. So I thought of fixing the problem. Problem is, I'm lost at what to do because I was given conflicting fixes. Researching for it gave me same results.
if you wrote on watpad you wouldve gotten no views. if you wrote on SH you'd have gotten same, etc etc

audience doesn't define the work. if you want to write for the sake of it then audience and stats do not matter. if you're writing for market you have to adapt. thats about it.
 

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I don't think I'll continue with writing. I suffered enough, and wasted time and resources for nothing.
Understandable. But what about the friends you made along the way? Friends you won't met if you never start writing? It's not for nothing.

We're here for you if you need someone to talk to.
 

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if you wrote on watpad you wouldve gotten no views. if you wrote on SH you'd have gotten same, etc etc

audience doesn't define the work. if you want to write for the sake of it then audience and stats do not matter. if you're writing for market you have to adapt. thats about it.
I am trying to adapt, but I don't know what to do. Been following advice that didn't help at all. I've been asking for people I trust to look at my work, but nothing came out of it.

It's really frustrating, but I cannot force someone as well. Not even when I can pay.
Understandable. But what about the friends you made along the way? Friends you won't met if you never start writing? It's not for nothing.

We're here for you if you need someone to talk to.
Writing and friendship are different matters. Yes, I wasted time and effort, but the people remains.

I'm dropping writing coz it's eating a lot of my time and resources, as well as my focus, and I get almost nothing from it. Like @greyblob said I am stubborn, but not to the point I'll destroy myself just to continue with an increasingly frustrating passion.
 

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I think what he needs right now is an audience. Real audience. Strangers that enjoy his story (which i found pretty enjoyable tbh)

Even i feel lonely after 6 month writing alone (that's why i came here), let alone Hans who had write for years.

I simply try to help him to pass through the algorithm to find the audience, and see where it goes
 

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edit: Posted too quickly, sudden irl issue. Apologies~
read up to: Page Seventeen

this is gonna be anticlimtic. i have no way of rating this. it's not really a novel in the conventional sense. there are no characters beside the mc. story is.. alright? I dunno. I'd have to be invested with the mc to care. mc feels a tad corny and a bit insane which is good? up to discussion i guess

was kinda hoping mumblers would just be regular humans and she'd be batshit insane but i guess not. I dont really read this. i usually skip/skim most of what i read until i see dialogue quotes so this was compeletly out of my field
 

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this is gonna be anticlimtic. i have no way of rating this. it's not really a novel in the conventional sense. there are no characters beside the mc. story is.. alright? I dunno. I'd have to be invested with the mc to care. mc feels a tad corny and a bit insane which is good? up to discussion i guess
How anticlimactic.

This is unlike you, where is the roast? Are we feeling uninspired today?

was kinda hoping mumblers would just be regular humans and she'd be batshit insane but i guess not. I dont really read this. i usually skip/skim most of what i read until i see dialogue quotes so this was compeletly out of my field
The mc is only a bit insane. That's a dealbreaker to me. Insanity have no limits. As a Malkavian, I'd know.

Make the mc crazy crazy. Don't hold back.
 
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read up to: Page Seventeen

this is gonna be anticlimtic. i have no way of rating this. it's not really a novel in the conventional sense. there are no characters beside the mc. story is.. alright? I dunno. I'd have to be invested with the mc to care. mc feels a tad corny and a bit insane which is good? up to discussion i guess

was kinda hoping mumblers would just be regular humans and she'd be batshit insane but i guess not. I dont really read this. i usually skip/skim most of what i read until i see dialogue quotes so this was compeletly out of my field
Yeah, it's definitely not for everyone so I like seeing some people's reactions. So far you're the second person that really had no idea what to fully make of it or feel about it. :blobrofl: Thanks for checking it out, I appreciate it~

How anticlimactic.

This is unlike you, where is the roast? Are we feeling uninspired today?


The mc is only a bit insane. That's a dealbreaker to me. Insanity have no limits. As a Malkavian, I'd know.

Make the mc crazy crazy. Don't hold back.

And I'll say that my MC is not just a 'bit' insane.
I won't spoil everything, but it's a slow-burn for a reason and you only read what she wants you to read.
 

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And I'll say that my MC is not just a 'bit' insane.
I won't spoil everything, but it's a slow-burn for a reason and you only read what she wants you to read.
So it's a progression fantasy. Post your story on r/progression
 

Rosica

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Eh? How'd you come to that conclusion? lmao
It's a psychological horror - post-apocalyptic diary
I don't come to that conclusion. The conclusion come to me. ClosedAI diagnosed me with derangement. Treat every advice I give you as a rambling of an asylum escapee.
 
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