want some thoughts to my dystopian hindu mythology novel

sleepandeatallday

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Dystopian!? And based on hindu mythology!!? I'm in!
hey thanks for being here, i want your thoughts on my novel DARKER OBSSEION:- https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1731575/darker-obsession

and thanks again for your time💖
I did read 3 chapters... but it felt a bit bland... especially the mc. I'm sorry. I don't think it's my cup of tea.

That said, the beginning was good. The tragedy did reel me in to read more but afterwards the story was bland. The time skip seemed too abrupt and it happened when we hardly knew about the mc.
 
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Dystopian!? And based on hindu mythology!!? I'm in!

I did read 3 chapters... but it felt a bit bland... especially the mc. I'm sorry. I don't think it's my cup of tea.

That said, the beginning was good. The tragedy did reel me in to read more but afterwards the story was bland. The time skip seemed too abrupt and it happened when we hardly knew about the mc.
hey thankyou so much for your time and thoughts i am so happy you shared your insight appriciated. i know it did may have feel abrupt and dull since i havent revealed much but the following chapter will change your thoughts and you will find mc way of thinking and his action are not as typical mc. you will find him unique and you may have some quenstions after reading following chapters and you will grasp the core and theme bit by bit . coming to time skip the thing is there was never a time skip the first chapter was mc memeroy he was recalling while coming back to asclorn . just give the following chapters a chance you will definetly like it . and thanks again for being here 💕💖
 

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hey thankyou so much for your time and thoughts i am so happy you shared your insight appriciated. i know it did may have feel abrupt and dull since i havent revealed much but the following chapter will change your thoughts and you will find mc way of thinking and his action are not as typical mc. you will find him unique and you may have some quenstions after reading following chapters and you will grasp the core and theme bit by bit . coming to time skip the thing is there was never a time skip the first chapter was mc memeroy he was recalling while coming back to asclorn . just give the following chapters a chance you will definetly like it . and thanks again for being here 💕💖
oh I'm glad then! I was a bit miffed cause so far it didn't seem dystopian but maybe it'll later be revealed in further chapters.
coming to time skip the thing is there was never a time skip the first chapter was mc memeroy he was recalling while coming back to asclorn
oh... I get it now. Sorry. I apologize for getting it wrong.
 

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hey thankyou so much for your time and thoughts i am so happy you shared your insight appriciated. i know it did may have feel abrupt and dull since i havent revealed much but the following chapter will change your thoughts and you will find mc way of thinking and his action are not as typical mc. you will find him unique and you may have some quenstions after reading following chapters and you will grasp the core and theme bit by bit . coming to time skip the thing is there was never a time skip the first chapter was mc memeroy he was recalling while coming back to asclorn . just give the following chapters a chance you will definetly like it . and thanks again for being here 💕💖

Why do you explicitly state that this is not with the help of AI when it clearly is?

You can barely get a sentence straight when posting or responding to comments.

Third story, I was willing to give feedback today, which turns out to be AI. What a disappointment. Time to stop for today.
 

sleepandeatallday

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Why do you explicitly state that this is not with the help of AI when it clearly is?

You can barely get a sentence straight when posting or responding to comments.

Third story, I was willing to give feedback today, which turns out to be AI. What a disappointment. Time to stop for today.
Whaat!? It's AI? How do you spot the difference.

ugh now I feel like I had wasted my time on this story! :<
 

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Why do you explicitly state that this is not with the help of AI when it clearly is?

You can barely get a sentence straight when posting or responding to comments.

Third story, I was willing to give feedback today, which turns out to be AI. What a disappointment. Time to stop fo
Why do you explicitly state that this is not with the help of AI when it clearly is?

You can barely get a sentence straight when posting or responding to comments.

Third story, I was willing to give feedback today, which turns out to be AI. What a disappointment. Time to stop for today.
"Thank you for reaching out with your concern—I completely understand why you might ask that, especially with how common AI tools are becoming.
However, I stand by my statement: THIS STORY IS NOT AI GENRATED OR HAVE ANY ROLE IN STORY .
Here is the distinction: I use AI tools exclusively for grammar, punctuation, and polishing, similar to an advanced spelling-and-grammar checker. I do not use it for content generation. The theme, plot, character arcs, world-building, and every sentence of dialogue are completely man-made, drafted, and edited by me.
I understand that sometimes AI detectors can falsely flag human writing because I use AI to check if my sentences are grammatically clear, but the 'soul,' creativity, and structure of this work come directly from my imagination. English is not my first language that why i use ai tools to check if what i've wrote is grammatically correct and feel authentic. and i've never used ai to respond on comments even if its my second or third language i am more than qualifeid to do so on my own.
I appreciate you being observant, as it shows you care about authentic writing.
Whaat!? It's AI? How do you spot the difference.

ugh now I feel like I had wasted my time on this story! :<
Oh no, please don’t feel that way! I completely understand the frustration, especially with how much AI-generated content is floating around these days. It’s hard to tell what’s "real" anymore.
To be 100% clear: you haven't wasted your time. Every plot twist, the world-building, and the emotional heart of this story came directly from my own brain. I only use AI as a high-powered grammar checker to polish the "how" of the writing, but the "what"—the heart and the journey—is 100% man-made.
Thank you for being honest about your concerns—it means a lot that you care enough about the work to ask! Does knowing it’s a human-crafted story with just a digital polish restore your trust in the story and characters?
 
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