ElijahRyne
A Hermit that’s NOT that Lazy, currentlycomplainen
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Your goal is to write a ’first chapter’ while 1. staying in style (you can reword original prompt to fit your style), 2. introduce the main conflict and theme of the story, and 3. Introduce the pov character and their goals. Min 500 more words max 2,000. By how well you match these criteria is how I will review your work, bonus points may be available.
Here is the prompt:
The sweltering heat and smell of sweat, blood, and vomit was enough to make one unacquainted with it nauseous, we grew used to it on the second day. Despite the patrolling overseers, we quickly learned to protect our skin by putting our spare clothes on our scorching metal seats. No speaking was the rule. The first to break it was thrown in front of the train, Dustin something or other, the overwhelming numbing hum and clicks of the train overrided all other thoughts anyways. We passed through listless city after listless city. The roar of the train of death scared all left as we raced into the war station after war station. Each stop another ten sacrifices to the front, Szfeld’s capital was only ten miles away you know. Another ten or twenty thousand and we would be half a mile closer.
Before we left….
Here is the prompt:
The sweltering heat and smell of sweat, blood, and vomit was enough to make one unacquainted with it nauseous, we grew used to it on the second day. Despite the patrolling overseers, we quickly learned to protect our skin by putting our spare clothes on our scorching metal seats. No speaking was the rule. The first to break it was thrown in front of the train, Dustin something or other, the overwhelming numbing hum and clicks of the train overrided all other thoughts anyways. We passed through listless city after listless city. The roar of the train of death scared all left as we raced into the war station after war station. Each stop another ten sacrifices to the front, Szfeld’s capital was only ten miles away you know. Another ten or twenty thousand and we would be half a mile closer.
Before we left….
