Thoughts on my story synopsis?

[Sylver]

Monster Girl Chronicles Book 1: KuliKuli the Nekomata

In this Medieval World of Fantasy, full of smut, romance, and mystery, welcome to a tale of Magic and Monsters! When a lonely farmer takes in an unconscious stray cat he discovered in the aftermath of a storm, he gets more than he bargained for when his new feline friend...

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I've been working on my synopsis to make it more appealing and interesting while doing a good job of summarizing the initial plot summary to entice new readers. Would you mind reading the synopsis and letting me know if it suffices or needs improvement?

 

[DemonOppai]

When a lonely farmer takes in an unconscious stray cat he discovered in the aftermath of a storm, he gets more than he bargained for when his new feline friend turns out to be a monster girl transformed into this innocent creature. Unable to remember anything at all before the incident, the nekomata remains a mystery to all she encounters.

This should be your synopsis. It’s short, straight to the point of what we can expect the story to be while also leaving a little mystery for us to want to discover.
You don’t want it to be very long. It can put some readers off. I personally don’t like long synopsis. One of my stories synopsis is only a sentence long.

“A boy finds himself unable to shake off an overbearing girl that won’t leave him alone.”

And it’s doing quite well.

 

[Sylver]

This should be your synopsis. It’s short, straight to the point of what we can expect the story to be while also leaving a little mystery for us to want to discover.
You don’t want it to be very long. It can put some readers off. I personally don’t like long synopsis. One of my stories synopsis is only a sentence long.

“A boy finds himself unable to shake off an overbearing girl that won’t leave him alone.”

And it’s doing quite well.

But when I did shorten the synopsis further, it felt too condensed and didn't give enough intrigue due to the text being brief and straightforward. I was hoping my synopsis was short enough, the beginning is catchy and the middle is a fun summation of the basics, while the ending bit adds mystery and intrigue foreshadowing what's to come!

I can try and shorten it further I suppose, I really liked it now but I'll change it and see how it works for a few weeks. Are you sure it's not also you publishing several chapters a day that contibutes to your successful viewership? Congratulations on that by the way, I really hope to someday reach that number for my work :)

 

[DemonOppai]

But when I did shorten the synopsis further, it felt too condensed and didn't give enough intrigue due to the text being brief and straightforward. I was hoping my synopsis was short enough, the beginning is catchy and the middle is a fun summation of the basics, while the ending bit adds mystery and intrigue foreshadowing what's to come!

I can try and shorten it further I suppose, I really liked it now but I'll change it and see how it works for a few weeks. Are you sure it's not also you publishing several chapters a day that contibutes to your successful viewership? Congratulations on that by the way, I really hope to someday reach that number for my work :)

If you like it now. Then keep it as it is. The most important thing is how you feel about it.