Writing Prompt Breaking the curse

CheertheSecond

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I would love to have this being made into a series but I am incapable of. If anyone can, please do. :3

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In a noble house, there was a haughty, selfish, ignorant, and arrogant young lady. Despite the love and effort the family poured into her, she grew up no better than when she was young. Her personalities caused a great tragedy to her house. Her parents were dead. Her brothers were handicapped. The house’s finance was in difficulty after the confiscation. The house chased her away and migrated to a new place to start their new humble beginning. Driven by guilt, she pledged with an obscure entity. She sacrificed her soul to become the spirit shield for all members of her family and turned her body into a monstrous creature to protect her relatives from the shadow. Overtime, the family discovered her story and they forgave her. Finally at peace, her body turned into ash and her soul became merely protecting energy to the house. From her ash though, a small girl arose. She was the spitting image of her predecessor. The family raised the small girl with love and care. During a great plague, when everyone in their town was affected, the girl was contracted with the illness and died. From her ash, a new one was born. This girl later shielded a young descendant of the house from an assassination and died. The next girl asked to marry a powerful man. The enormous brideprice helped the family greatly but the girl died later on due to abuse from her husband. A new girl later on appeared near the house. It was at that time the family realised that a terrible curse was put on each incarnation of the girl. They would be reborn and died a horrible dead for the benefit of the family.

Edit: a kind lich told the family that the curse was created by the concentrated guilt of the girl. Although she was forgiven, the curse was already done. The lich also said he was not sure how to break it but hope that kindness and love could gradually lessen the curse.

With this knowledge, the family swore to protect the next girl to the best of their ability and break the atrocious curse that torments the girl.
 
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So if that's all setting I'm assuming you want the story to be about what you said in the last sentence.
 
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I don't know. The one that caused the curse with her being a asshole is already dead so, fin?
 

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I mean this girl has died how many times? Like 4 times? And somehow this benefited the families that had her? Even though one of them seemed to die from the plague.
I don't know. It just seems a over complicated way of having redemption for this character that seems more like a object than a person?

It's probably something that would be better suited for you to write. Since you're a lot more passionate about this style of story.
 
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I would add another layer to it, with following generations of the family coming into discord as it grew to prominence due to the girl. Some want to continue to benefit and some want to free her. And this causes infighting and tragedy that only continues to grow.

But I won't because I have yet to manage to finish a single series ince started.
 

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Yeah, the girl doesn't really seem like a character. If I heard about a story like this I would assume that the point-of-view character is not the girl, but someone from the 3rd or 4th generation who uncovers this mystery and resolves it. The interesting question is probably more about "is this girl the same person, or a different person? who should bear the guilt of this curse, and how is it possible to let it go?" But the girl (whatever memories / personality she now has) does not sound like an active protagonist in this -- it's more up to the descendants of the family how to turn the tragedy around, and learning about that / figuring it out / coming to terms with it is more important.

That might be interesting, but finding someone who wants to write it is another story entirely! Ideas are always cheap and easy, which can be a confusing lesson to learn when an idea seems so good, and there are so many ideas out there that seem bad or boring. But this is because developing and properly executing an idea is the hard part.

Also, this sounds a little bit like The House in Fata Morgana, might be worth checking that out
 

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78 year later after the last incarnation, the ancient incarnation curse is finally expired and gone for good.

The casting mark is destroyed due to recent disaster of earthquakes by mana leylines near the noble house, causing imbalance of the mana in the air and land within earthquake radius.

Lots of lives were lost that day, and hundreds of magical system life support installed in the city was gone for good. The citizen must live in post apocalyptic world with no magic infrastructures, as magic infrastructure is the core of their live in this era of magic advancement. It's like how we're living without internet after earthquake.
 

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Do I get to pick the plague?
Because if so, I want everyone to catch Eldritch Mullet Syndrome.
Symptoms Include:
- Growing A Mullet Overnight, even if you were bald when you went to bed.
- Restless Cranium
- You start playing a string instrument.
- You constantly taste the back of your neck.
- The urge to take out a loan to finance a tattoo.
- A compulsion to buy Aquanet and a lighter for the purpose of setting ants on fire
- Vermin start crawling out of your shadow, including, but not limited to, bats, rats, oxen, cigars, frogs, and the occasional malnourished Sean Penn.
 

CheertheSecond

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Back to the drawing board then :3
I would add another layer to it, with following generations of the family coming into discord as it grew to prominence due to the girl. Some want to continue to benefit and some want to free her. And this causes infighting and tragedy that only continues to grow.

But I won't because I have yet to manage to finish a single series ince started.
I got 3 hiatus series.
Cheer to us, comrades! :D
 
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