Would anyone like to leave feedback on my story/synopsis? Good or bad.

[KDBooks97]

All criticisms will be used to improve future drafts and editions of my story. <3 Thank you.

*There are no perfect people in this story; no villains, no perfect protagonists and no fairytale romance. There is, however, realistic examples of neurodivergence, discovering yourself, LGBTQIA characters and nuanced depictions of mental health problems, self harm, religious and generational trauma.*

"My name is Faith Elizabeth Samuels. Well, it used to be, before I left my fundamentalist helicopter parents and started going by Luna...
My counselor tells me writing will help me to 'heal'. Somehow, writing my feelings of depression, anxiety, self harm and suicidal thoughts will negate a lifetime of 'bad feelings' about my self image, mental health and general well-being. Sounds legit. So, fair reader, does my little tale of woe intrigue you? If so, come join my merry band of misfits on this roller coaster of life."

A -sometimes- uplifting story about growing up and overcoming life's challenges. Laugh, cry and smile with our cynical author as she tries to traverse the scary life of after high school while battling her inner demons and conquering the ever-terrifying world of adulting.

Rated Mature (17+) For themes of self-harm, depression, anxiety and some sexuality. **NOT EXPLICIT**

The Miserably Macabre Tales of Luna Samuels

'My name is Faith Elizabeth Samuels. Well, it used to be, before I left my fundamentalist helicopter parents and started going by Luna... My counselor tells me writing will help me to 'heal'. Somehow, writing my feelings of depression, anxiety, self harm and suicidal thoughts will negate a...

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[RepresentingPride]

I won't read your story since I don't like this type of story and won't be able to judge it correctly, but if I can give you an advice, you should add number to your chapters, it's more easy for the readers to look for a specific chapter and clearer to read when on the list of chapters.

 

[Deleted member 128077]

Going by what you have here, it feels like Lana is twitter addicted teenager who think not having a phone for two minutes is the same as child abuse. It also feels like you are trying too hard to show this character is edgy... I'm not sure if that's the right word, but I hope you get the point.

*There are no perfect people in this story; no villains, no perfect protagonists and no fairytale romance. There is, however, realistic examples of neurodivergence, discovering yourself, LGBTQIA characters and nuanced depictions of mental health problems, self harm, religious and generational trauma.*

This part I think you should just remove. It adds nothing to the description. Maybe the LGB part if there is no tag for that, for people looking for/avoiding those types of stories.

 

[KDBooks97]

I won't read your story since I don't like this type of story and won't be able to judge it correctly, but if I can give you an advice, you should add number to your chapters, it's more easy for the readers to look for a specific chapter and clearer to read when on the list of chapters.

Thank you! I have added numbers!