"We didn’t lose the war. We lost the ability to choose.” — Need feedback on emotional sci-fi prologue about AI and surrender

[S.TrujilloL.]

Hi everyone, it’s a pleasure to be part of this amazing community.

I created an audiobook version of the prologue of The Story of Nemi, and I’d truly appreciate your honest feedback — whether you prefer listening, reading, or both. Your perspective means a lot and helps shape the direction of this emotional sci-fi journey.

The log is narrated by a scientist who lived through the fall. It’s quiet. Emotional. Uneasy.

I don’t need approval. I need truth.

- Text: https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1726481-the-story-of-nemi/chapter/1726577/

- Audiobook:

 

[BlikBlind]

I read the first two chapters and listened to the audio. You're doing excellent work.

There’s something about that tone — restrained, measured, almost resigned — that really speaks to me. It’s not trying to impress, but it leaves a mark. As a psychology student, I can see where you're heading with the ethical dilemmas and the use of AI… and I know it's intentional.

Great focus. Strong theme. I’m interested to see where you take it.​

 

[S.TrujilloL.]

I read the first two chapters and listened to the audio. You're doing excellent work.

There’s something about that tone — restrained, measured, almost resigned — that really speaks to me. It’s not trying to impress, but it leaves a mark. As a psychology student, I can see where you're heading with the ethical dilemmas and the use of AI… and I know it's intentional.

Great focus. Strong theme. I’m interested to see where you take it.​

Thank you so much — I really appreciate you taking the time.

I recently uploaded the first five chapters of this story, and I’ve been wondering how that tone would land with readers.

It means a lot to hear that the restraint and emotional weight are coming through — especially from someone studying psychology. You're right: the ethical dilemmas and AI elements are very intentional, and they’ll keep deepening as the logs continue.

Thanks again for the encouragement. It helps more than you know.