Slow or fast stories?

[Cookiez_N_Potionz]

If it's possible could I get feedback on my characters and world-building?

The Maverick and The Succubus [LitRPG]

5 Systems. 5 Royal Families. Greetings, Champion! 17 year-old, Collin Rex is a football player with a heart of gold. But his easygoing life is flipped upside-down when his older siblings fall into a mysterious coma. With no more tricks in their playbook Collin's folks decide to move back to...

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5 Systems.
5 Royal Families.
Greetings, Champion!

17 year-old, Collin Rex is a football player with a heart of gold. But his easygoing life is flipped upside-down when his older siblings fall into a mysterious coma. With no more tricks in their playbook Collin's folks decide to move back to their hometown to help him cope with the emotional shock.

At his new school he bumps into a girl named Helena and realize they're childhood friends. Soon, Collin begins to remember things and then one day he accidentally obtains something called: The Knight System.

But it wasn't an accident...

9 years ago he was chosen to become a Maverick, a peacemaker between the mortal and supernatural communities.

 

[blackcrowcrowd]

What do you mean slow of fast

 

[Worthy39]

Did you mean slow OR fast?

 

[Golden_Hyde]

I... think he's typing the forum title really fast; his fingers are misplaced from "r" to "f", and it's actually quite possible, assuming he's typing on an old netbook.

 

[Cookiez_N_Potionz]

I... think he's typing the forum title really fast; his fingers are misplaced from "r" to "f", and it's actually quite possible, assuming he's typing on an old netbook.

Lol, sorry. I made this thread right before going to sleep last night.