Part 2 of Chapter 1 of a New Series

[YeshuasHeart]

Here's part 2 of chapter 1. What do you think of it and what needs to be improved?

 

[Ilikewaterkusa]

Here's part 2 of chapter 1. What do you think of it and what needs to be improved?

Where’s the part 1

 

[YeshuasHeart]

Where’s the part 1

Here it is.