Need Help Starting This Story

[Arch9CivilReactor]

I’m currently working on the drafts of a Webnovel I’m working on called “The Orchestrator Has Possessed Me: Their Berserker”. The story is about a game villain, but the difference between this and other academy-based possessions is that this has the original ‘villain’ keep his ego.

The reason for the long title is that a game programmer down on his luck called Venril possesses a typical fighting game villain called Onyx Strome. Originally artificial intelligence based NPC that refused to act like a ‘villain’.

In order to counteract this, Venril was given the job of ruining his life so he’d act based on misunderstandings and bad faith. Not a full-on villain, but an unpleasant guy who would use any excuse to get into fights and act very chaotically.

After it was decided by the game’s writing team that Onyx would die to further the story, Venril started to feel bad due to how realistic the NPC was. Feeling like he had become the same kind of unkind god he believed ruined his own life.

Venril possesses Onyx Strome, the villain, after his death… However, only his memories get transferred without the ego. Onyx ends up finding out why his life is so messy and the plans the ‘gods’ had for him and the rest of the world.

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That last paragraph is where I’m finding difficulties writing because the exact point Venril possesses Onyx is after an explosion was set off within his residence. Onyx used his body to cover the bomb in order to save his servants.

One of them becoming loyal after this incident.

I’m having trouble figuring out how to transition from here to his school life. The MC ends up permanently blinded and partially paralysed due to the incident. I’m planning to make him the type of character that only gets strong when he’s injured, but not when he’s properly taken care of.

Mostly because I’m not familiar how the MC would internalise these events. I’m unsure of how to write his character specifically outside these events. Onyx Strome just before the explosion incident made friends with a maid. He promised to be better… but I’m unsure how to present that in dialogue and the way he speaks.

This world has nobility and modern society blended together. I have ideas for other characters, but I’m unsure of how to write the main character’s struggles. I feel like he’d turn too generic if all he wants is stuff like world peace.

I don’t know what a Young Master character would want if he was given the chance to pursue his dreams. After all, he’s not poor/traumatised by his parents death/etc. Things are going wrong for him currently, but it seems like a tragedy.

I’m not sure how to make it motivating. Like to make this push him towards a singular goal.

 

[Indicterra]

Put him in school for his own safety after the explosion (assassination attempt) harry potter way

 

[Vitriol]

I’m having trouble figuring out how to transition from here to his school life.

One could make education compulsory for nobility by law or smth like that…

I’m not sure how to make it motivating. Like to make this push him towards a singular goal.

Well, since he received Venril’s memories wouldn’t be his own death be motivating enough? Like, if he does nothing he’s gonna die lol.

Personally, I think the idea is a bit convoluted and needs more thought and some polishing. (Why would a programmer go through all those hoops and loops to make an NPC a villain… can’t they just make another AI NPC from scratch?)

Also, just going to nitpick, but possessing literally means “the state of having, owning, or controlling something”. Venril controls neither Onyx’s mind nor his body. So calling it a “possession” is kinda wrong.

 

[Justhetip...]

One could make education compulsory for nobility by law or smth like that…



Well, since he received Venril’s memories wouldn’t be his own death be motivating enough? Like, if he does nothing he’s gonna die lol.

Personally, I think the idea is a bit convoluted and needs more thought and some polishing. (Why would a programmer go through all those hoops and loops to make an NPC a villain… can’t they just make another AI NPC from scratch?)

Also, just going to nitpick, but possessing literally means “the state of having, owning, or controlling something”. Venril controls neither Onyx’s mind nor his body. So calling it a “possession” is kinda wrong.

Blame the big three of Korea, RPR. Regression, Possession, and Reincarnation.

I don't know, but somehow, they replaced the word transmigration with possession.

Sometimes too, the MC goes "I became possessed" like ngga you possessed this poor fella what the heck are you saying?

 

[Vitriol]

Blame the big three of Korea, RPR. Regression, Possession, and Reincarnation.

I don't know, but somehow, they replaced the word transmigration with possession.

Sometimes too, the MC goes "I became possessed" like ngga you possessed this poor fella what the heck are you saying?

Tbh I think it’s a translation problem (or at least in most cases).

Although transmigration can be considered to be possession, the lines get blurry there.

Aaaand some people just shouldn’t be allowed to translate…

 

[Justhetip...]

Tbh I think it’s a translation problem (or at least in most cases).

Although transmigration can be considered to be possession, the lines get blurry there.

Aaaand some people just shouldn’t be allowed to translate…

Yeah, the translation issue has gotten even worse these days lol.

Even if you use AI to translate, is just proofreading before you post a lot to ask??

 

[CharlesEBrown]

Aaaand some people just shouldn’t be allowed to translate…

Or even to transmigrate?

 

[Vitriol]

Or even to transmigrate?

That too, someone gotta stop them.

Especially japanese mcs. I’ve seen things. Redo of healer is one of them. (That one technically counts as regression ig). Not to mention that there’s “Isekai Shikkaku” where mc bans others from that fantasy world lmao. Truly, some people shouldn’t get reincarnated/transmigrated and etc. at all.

 

[Arch9CivilReactor]

One could make education compulsory for nobility by law or smth like that…



Well, since he received Venril’s memories wouldn’t be his own death be motivating enough? Like, if he does nothing he’s gonna die lol.

Personally, I think the idea is a bit convoluted and needs more thought and some polishing. (Why would a programmer go through all those hoops and loops to make an NPC a villain… can’t they just make another AI NPC from scratch?)

Also, just going to nitpick, but possessing literally means “the state of having, owning, or controlling something”. Venril controls neither Onyx’s mind nor his body. So calling it a “possession” is kinda wrong.

I should called it ‘Failed Possession’ then. I’m not sure on what to call it other than a failure to take control of the intended target. Transmigration seems better but that would imply that Venril retains his ego. I’m not sure how to put it.

 

[CharlesEBrown]

I should called it ‘Failed Possession’ then. I’m not sure on what to call it other than a failure to take control of the intended target. Transmigration seems better but that would imply that Venril retains his ego. I’m not sure how to put it.

Sounds almost like a "soul fusion" of sorts.

 

[corruption]

Firstly, deal with results of the explosion, and why it occurred.
Did it occur because someone was targeting him, and why? Were they angry at him because of the events the programmer had set up?
The fact he tried to protect his servants would be interesting, but why only one servant became loyal to him? Did the others blame him for the bomb in the first place?

If word got out about him trying to protect his servants, that could help his reputation.
The MC could use the memories to uncover the misunderstandings and try settling things. Of course, some people could have shifted blame to him with his already bad rep and now his settling things would try to cause problems for him to cover up their own past actions.

That abilities of his is bad, unless you can find a reason to justify it.
Also, transferring to school while in that condition? How the heck could he even study?
If he was like that before school, then how could he be part of the story as an antagonist, if not a villain?

Here is what I recommend:
The explosion was from a rival family to kill his family. That is why most of the servants are not loyal, because they believe the family brought it on them. It also means his family is gone.
The rivals who killed his family make things bad for the MC, doing things to provoke him and cause misunderstanding.
MC does not know about that and thus is easily deceived and manipulated.
The plot had him being used to cause problems for the MC, to harm both of them.
Less injuries, maybe only blind in one eye and some physical injuries. The reason he is boarding at the school is because he has no living family, and his home was destroyed.
Maybe had the rivals steal his family fortune.

 

[Vitriol]

I should called it ‘Failed Possession’ then. I’m not sure on what to call it other than a failure to take control of the intended target. Transmigration seems better but that would imply that Venril retains his ego. I’m not sure how to put it.

Failed possession implies that Venril either had the intention to possess or Venril and Onyx fought for control or something, which doesn’t seem to be the case. Venril is just a normal human guy to me. No possession powers or anything.

Sounds almost like a "soul fusion" of sorts.

Tbh soul fusion means that Onyx wouldn’t keep his ego fully intact (or at least he would be influenced). Memory fusion is more like that. But one can argue that memories shape a persons identity. And then you fall into a rabbit hole with all that.

Most stories that I read don’t tackle the problem of having an entire person’s memories beamed into your brain. The implications and consequences are huge.

Also, why can’t you just take both things? Onyx gets to keep his ego and Venril does possess him. You can play around with ideas and dynamics as much as you what. Why settle on one thing? You could make Venril an antagonist instead and actively trying to make Onyx a villain (mirroring his life as a game dev) or just trying to help him and feeling guilty instead. (Both situations provide conflict, although the second one is more sneaky, as it is internal conflict).

I also agree with prev post that you have to justify a lot of stuff. And when the main mc’s entire “villain” reputation is simply built on misunderstandings and bad faith it becomes really difficult to make it believable.