need feedback

[Mister_Benis]

hi, i've been writing a series for a while, but i really dont know whether or not im going the right way with it. either way i'd just like some feedback on it so i know what to do better and what im doing good already.
my series is called: the legacy of the avatar

 

[NikkuNii]

I gotchu :)
Okay, so the first thing that I notice is that you have a lot of details smashed together into one paragraph. I'm not going to tell you how to write, but I suggest that you create more paragraphs. :)

 

[Mr.Grey-Cat]

I can relate, totally. I mean, my novel has been going for months, but except for some readers I recognize, and some rare comments, I had no feedback, and you know what?

MOST of the authors are like that, at least those who are not famous on this site. we pretty much work the hell of ourselves, and at the end of the day, we are still listening Only to our own voice as we groan from headache, but hey, look at the bright side.

now that you have no feedback, at least you won't ever get negative reviews.

 

[Mister_Benis]

I gotchu :)
Okay, so the first thing that I notice is that you have a lot of details smashed together into one paragraph. I'm not going to tell you how to write, but I suggest that you create more paragraphs. :)

i dont know for what chapter this is feedback, but if it is for one of the earlier chapters then please read 12&13 as they are more of what i make now, i try to use paragraphs, but i dont want it to feel empty either. thanks for the advice though, ill keep it in mind

 

[Mister_Benis]

I gotchu :)
Okay, so the first thing that I notice is that you have a lot of details smashed together into one paragraph. I'm not going to tell you how to write, but I suggest that you create more paragraphs. :)

ive tried working this into chapter 13, i'd like to hear what you think! ( its been out for a while, but still)

I can relate, totally. I mean, my novel has been going for months, but except for some readers I recognize, and some rare comments, I had no feedback, and you know what?

MOST of the authors are like that, at least those who are not famous on this site. we pretty much work the hell of ourselves, and at the end of the day, we are still listening Only to our own voice as we groan from headache, but hey, look at the bright side.

now that you have no feedback, at least you won't ever get negative reviews.

even negative reviews tell you something that you should change for the better imo. i just need to know if what im writing doesn't well.. suck if it does, ill change it to make it better if it doesnt, great