Need feedback on "spicy" scenes

[CountVanBadger]

I just wrote some spicy chapters for XNPC. This my first time ever writing anything like that. I want them to be, you know, exciting without being outright smutty. Would anyone be interested in beta reading them to tell me if I did all right? It's three chapters, equaling a little less than 9000 words total. Let me know and I'll message you the Google Docs link.

 

[SouthernMaiden]

What level of spicy are we talking? Like romantic sex scene that is heavy on euphemism?

 

[Daeron]

I just wrote some spicy chapters for XNPC. This my first time ever writing anything like that. I want them to be, you know, exciting without being outright smutty. Would anyone be interested in beta reading them to tell me if I did all right? It's three chapters, equaling a little less than 9000 words total. Let me know and I'll message you the Google Docs link.

I can help you with my opinion if either i grasp the tension or not.

 

[CountVanBadger]

What level of spicy are we talking? Like romantic sex scene that is heavy on euphemism?

I tried to write a sex scene without actually writing a sex scene, if you get what I mean. Hopefully it's clear enough that everyone will know what's going on, but vague enough that it won't get flagged.

if either i grasp the tension or not.

I mean, it's not really supposed to be a tense scene, so...

 

[SouthernMaiden]

I tried to write a sex scene without actually writing a sex scene, if you get what I mean. Hopefully it's clear enough that everyone will know what's going on, but vague enough that it won't get flagged.

Gotcha, that is really difficult to do.

If you want to PM me a link I can give you some basic thoughts. Of course, won't offer any detailed edits, just how the chapter comes across to me if I was a normal reader

 

[Daeron]

I mean, it's not really supposed to be a tense scene, so...

Well, what i mean wasn't that kind of tense scene, more like romantic tension between the characters

Would you mind telling me it was 'straight' relationship or others?

 

[CountVanBadger]

Would you mind telling me it was 'straight' relationship or others?

Yes, it's a straight relationship.

 

[Daeron]

Yes, it's a straight relationship.

If you want, you can DM me, i'll try give you my honest opinion regarding it.