Looking for some feedback

[Pratys]

Hello !

I'm new to Scribble Hub and would love some feedback in my prologue. Keep in mind that english isn't my first language, so if you see any grammatical error, please feel free to correct me.

Thank You.

Æther - Prologue | Scribble Hub

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[KoyukiMegumi]

Hitted, is hit. There are other issues, though I am not the best expert on them. But you should use something like Grammarly/ProWritingAid to help. I still don't know the importance of a prologue. I think most stories are fine without it. This one in particular, though, I feel like I don't know what to say about it.

I know the MC of the chapter is shocked and scared, but otherwise. I have 0 clues about what is going on. I don't know if that is what you were going for, but it is what it left. Then again, I am bad at third-person stories. I can't connect well enough with them. So hopefully someone else with more experience with it can help.

Other than that. It is a first good try. Feels a bit short.

 

[Pratys]

ost stories are fine without it. This one in particular, though, I feel like I don't know what to say about it.

I know the MC of the chapter is shocked and scared, but otherwise. I have 0 clues about what is going on. I don't know if that is what you were going for, but it is what it left. Then again, I am bad at third-person stories. I can't

The prologue, for me, is a way to give a brief introduction to what the history and its tone will be. I'll develop and introduct better the characters in chapter 1.

Thank you for the feedback.