Looking for feedback on my first chapters

[LeslieLevendale]

Dear fellow readers and writers,


I’d be very grateful for some constructive feedback on the opening chapters of my novel The Shape of Kindness, which I published here on Scribble Hub on 8 March 2026.


Here’s the link to the series:
The Shape of Kindness | Scribble Hub

It’s a character‑driven, slow‑burn queer romance with a literary tone, and I’d love to hear your thoughts on pacing, voice, and overall readability.


Thank you in advance for taking the time to have a look.

L. C. L.

 

[Makimaam]

The voice? There is no voice.

Literary tone. That’s what you think it is.

Would I read it? No.

Where would I have stopped? At the so-called “voice” demonstrated in the synopsis.

 

[LeslieLevendale]

The voice? There is no voice.

Literary tone. That’s what you think it is.

Would I read it? No.

Where would I have stopped? At the so-called “voice” demonstrated in the synopsis.

Thank you for taking the time to read the synopsis and share your thoughts.
I appreciate your candour.

I realise my style isn’t for everyone; some readers prefer something bold and dramatic, while mine seems to have wandered in wearing a beret and mumbling existential poetry under its breath.

In any case, I’m enjoying exploring this particular tone in my voice (or whichever philosophical distinction I’ve apparently tangled myself in), and I’m grateful you took a moment to let me know how it landed.

Even if, in this instance, it appears to have landed with all the grace of a baguette dropped from a great height.