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I need Feedback on this asshole character I created, His name is Kuzaryu Yaoi, and I think in nailed him, but I could use your input!
#10- Kuzaryu Goes Too Far!
Two days had passed since that day, normally Kuzaryu would have been expelled, but since his mother was behind the plot to flood the school with illegal drugs, he was given a seccond chance, granted he had to remain bedridden until he got the Compund Sigma out of his system.
Me, i would have kicked his ass to the curb, after all the shit he pulled back in high school, thinking he's hot shit, when he ain't even shit to begin with, but the Dean told me that Kuzaryu wasn't to blame, his family's desire to surpass all others poisoned his mind.
Bullshit! he was an absolute shithead the day the doctor tore him out his slimeball mother's womb!
For now, i'll keep my eye on him, but i'm still got my Drake-Zooka on stand-by.
One day, Me, Byako and a couple of girls decided to have lunch at a local cafe, it was a saturday, and there was no class that day.
The two other girls were close friends we made, one was a tall, slender woman with raven black hair, red eyes and sported a pink T-shirt and pitch-black skinny jeans, her name was Nancy Beauragard, from Neo Paris, she had a C- Rank skill called "Lock-On" this literally make her a deadly sharpshooter, and not just with guns, bows and arrows, throwing daggers, slingshots, even spears!
The other one in the snow-white sleeveless sweater and denim mini-skirt with pink hair in buns wearing glasses is Bao Xiaolin, from Neo Shanghai, the eldest of the Bao family, for years the Bao Family has produced exceptional Superheroes, She is the only other S-Rank in Neo Eden besides myself, her power is "Weapon Body" she can summon varrious weapons from any part of her body!
"So, Iron Angel wants us to start thinking about our Hero Names.." Bao Xiaolin said.
"Fuck! already?" squeaked Byako, "I didn't think we get to that part so soon."
I was silent, the truth is, i had already thought of my Hero Name, i decided to hear from the other girls.
"I already have mine, Headshot." said Nancy as she sipped her soda.
"I'm Torn between Scattershot and Gun Queen!" Bao Xiaolin said.
"Ooh! go with Gun Queen, that sounds more badass!" Byako said.
"Ya think so?" Bao Xiaolin said with a smile
Byako nodded asshe bit into her sandwhich.
"What about you Ronnie?" asked Nancy.
"Well, i wanted to go with a lot of names, but i'm going with the name everyone gave me when i was 11."
i sipped my soda, "Arcade Girl, mainly because that's what people called me when i was little, when i wasn't at home or school, people could find me at the old arcade, hence the name, "Arcade Girl"
"Awww...that's so sweet!" Bao Xiaolin said.
"Indeed, it suits you..." Nancy replied.
On Monday, all of the students submitted their Hero Names, and i submitted mine, just then Kuzaryu walked by, son of a bitch made a full recovery.
"Arcade girl? Tch, why am i not suprised you would pick a mediocre name like that?"
"Kuzaryu, why am i not suprised you're still alive?" i said.
"This school had very advanced medical tech, anyway i picked my Hero Name as well." he said in a proud tone.
"What did you pick? Flaming Dick Magnet?" i snapped, earning the laughter of the girls.
"No, Lord Helfire! has a nice ring to it don't you agree?" he said.
"Dunno, Flaming Dick Magnet sounds better." i said flatly.
All the girls laughed at him, causing Kuzaryu to foam at the mouth.
"WHAT IS YOUR PROBLEM WITH ME?" Kuzaryu roared.
"You want that in alphabetic or in order how many people you've pissed off?" i said, "Scratch that, i i'll go with my gut."
I took a deep breath and spoke:
"You're vain, you're arrogant, you're an attention hog, you sham people for their interests, you have a tantrum when somone says "no" to you, you use your parents' connections to ruin their lives if they don't kiss the ground you walk on, you had my best friend expelled simply for not wanting to kiss you ass, when you KNOW she and i are lesbians, Shall i go on, or do you feel dumb enough?"
"I am the future heir of the Yaoi Family, it is my destiny to surpass all others, i wouldn't expect a lazy, video game playing loser to understand the responsiblility that comes with it, especially one with two gay moms!" he snapped.
Kuzaryu expected the entire class to laugh at me, but high schoolers aren't as shallow as they are TV.
then...SLAPP!!!
A powerfull slap was heard, it was Nancy, having slapped Kuzaryu with all the force she could muster.
"What the fuck is wrong with you! what the hell do you have against Ronnie, was it because she and Byako were the only girls who called you on your bullshit?" Nancy snapped.
"How dare you? i could ruin you AND your familiy's lives with one phone call, you french WHORE!" Kuzaryu roared.
That was it...this asshole needed a lession in mannors, "That..FUCKING..tears it! You, Me, Arena, 20 minutes!" i said.
"Oh really? what are the stakes?" Kuzuryu said.
"Loser drops out of Neo Eden for good!" i said, venom in my words.
Everyone gasped, even the teachers, even Iron Angel, who was watching the comotion in secret.
"Do you accept?" i said.
"Oh..you are so ON! but let's sweeten the pot, if you win, my family wil design you your own custom supersuit!" Kuzaryu said.
"Ronnie! don't do it! he's not worth it!" Nancy said.
"Do it Ronnie, show this Dick Magnet the difference between you and him!" cheered Byako.
We shook hands and the deal was sealed...
As Kuzaryu walked away to prepare, he turned to face Ronnie, "No need to worry Ronnie, even if you lose, i'm sure my familly will have use for you, my father could use another concubine!" he snorted as he left.
Iron Angel approached me, at first she was worried that i made a massive mistake, but after hearing the terrible things Kuzaryu said about her, she had only one thing to say to me...
"Ronnie?"
"Yeah?" i replied.
"Kick his ass..."
Chapter End.
Two days had passed since that day, normally Kuzaryu would have been expelled, but since his mother was behind the plot to flood the school with illegal drugs, he was given a seccond chance, granted he had to remain bedridden until he got the Compund Sigma out of his system.
Me, i would have kicked his ass to the curb, after all the shit he pulled back in high school, thinking he's hot shit, when he ain't even shit to begin with, but the Dean told me that Kuzaryu wasn't to blame, his family's desire to surpass all others poisoned his mind.
Bullshit! he was an absolute shithead the day the doctor tore him out his slimeball mother's womb!
For now, i'll keep my eye on him, but i'm still got my Drake-Zooka on stand-by.
One day, Me, Byako and a couple of girls decided to have lunch at a local cafe, it was a saturday, and there was no class that day.
The two other girls were close friends we made, one was a tall, slender woman with raven black hair, red eyes and sported a pink T-shirt and pitch-black skinny jeans, her name was Nancy Beauragard, from Neo Paris, she had a C- Rank skill called "Lock-On" this literally make her a deadly sharpshooter, and not just with guns, bows and arrows, throwing daggers, slingshots, even spears!
The other one in the snow-white sleeveless sweater and denim mini-skirt with pink hair in buns wearing glasses is Bao Xiaolin, from Neo Shanghai, the eldest of the Bao family, for years the Bao Family has produced exceptional Superheroes, She is the only other S-Rank in Neo Eden besides myself, her power is "Weapon Body" she can summon varrious weapons from any part of her body!
"So, Iron Angel wants us to start thinking about our Hero Names.." Bao Xiaolin said.
"Fuck! already?" squeaked Byako, "I didn't think we get to that part so soon."
I was silent, the truth is, i had already thought of my Hero Name, i decided to hear from the other girls.
"I already have mine, Headshot." said Nancy as she sipped her soda.
"I'm Torn between Scattershot and Gun Queen!" Bao Xiaolin said.
"Ooh! go with Gun Queen, that sounds more badass!" Byako said.
"Ya think so?" Bao Xiaolin said with a smile
Byako nodded asshe bit into her sandwhich.
"What about you Ronnie?" asked Nancy.
"Well, i wanted to go with a lot of names, but i'm going with the name everyone gave me when i was 11."
i sipped my soda, "Arcade Girl, mainly because that's what people called me when i was little, when i wasn't at home or school, people could find me at the old arcade, hence the name, "Arcade Girl"
"Awww...that's so sweet!" Bao Xiaolin said.
"Indeed, it suits you..." Nancy replied.
On Monday, all of the students submitted their Hero Names, and i submitted mine, just then Kuzaryu walked by, son of a bitch made a full recovery.
"Arcade girl? Tch, why am i not suprised you would pick a mediocre name like that?"
"Kuzaryu, why am i not suprised you're still alive?" i said.
"This school had very advanced medical tech, anyway i picked my Hero Name as well." he said in a proud tone.
"What did you pick? Flaming Dick Magnet?" i snapped, earning the laughter of the girls.
"No, Lord Helfire! has a nice ring to it don't you agree?" he said.
"Dunno, Flaming Dick Magnet sounds better." i said flatly.
All the girls laughed at him, causing Kuzaryu to foam at the mouth.
"WHAT IS YOUR PROBLEM WITH ME?" Kuzaryu roared.
"You want that in alphabetic or in order how many people you've pissed off?" i said, "Scratch that, i i'll go with my gut."
I took a deep breath and spoke:
"You're vain, you're arrogant, you're an attention hog, you sham people for their interests, you have a tantrum when somone says "no" to you, you use your parents' connections to ruin their lives if they don't kiss the ground you walk on, you had my best friend expelled simply for not wanting to kiss you ass, when you KNOW she and i are lesbians, Shall i go on, or do you feel dumb enough?"
"I am the future heir of the Yaoi Family, it is my destiny to surpass all others, i wouldn't expect a lazy, video game playing loser to understand the responsiblility that comes with it, especially one with two gay moms!" he snapped.
Kuzaryu expected the entire class to laugh at me, but high schoolers aren't as shallow as they are TV.
then...SLAPP!!!
A powerfull slap was heard, it was Nancy, having slapped Kuzaryu with all the force she could muster.
"What the fuck is wrong with you! what the hell do you have against Ronnie, was it because she and Byako were the only girls who called you on your bullshit?" Nancy snapped.
"How dare you? i could ruin you AND your familiy's lives with one phone call, you french WHORE!" Kuzaryu roared.
That was it...this asshole needed a lession in mannors, "That..FUCKING..tears it! You, Me, Arena, 20 minutes!" i said.
"Oh really? what are the stakes?" Kuzuryu said.
"Loser drops out of Neo Eden for good!" i said, venom in my words.
Everyone gasped, even the teachers, even Iron Angel, who was watching the comotion in secret.
"Do you accept?" i said.
"Oh..you are so ON! but let's sweeten the pot, if you win, my family wil design you your own custom supersuit!" Kuzaryu said.
"Ronnie! don't do it! he's not worth it!" Nancy said.
"Do it Ronnie, show this Dick Magnet the difference between you and him!" cheered Byako.
We shook hands and the deal was sealed...
As Kuzaryu walked away to prepare, he turned to face Ronnie, "No need to worry Ronnie, even if you lose, i'm sure my familly will have use for you, my father could use another concubine!" he snorted as he left.
Iron Angel approached me, at first she was worried that i made a massive mistake, but after hearing the terrible things Kuzaryu said about her, she had only one thing to say to me...
"Ronnie?"
"Yeah?" i replied.
"Kick his ass..."
Chapter End.