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Shores of Solace

There was some days I lived,
totally silent, totally helpless,
in a prison wrought in guilt,
built in the face of a cliff by the sea,
where salty water mixed with my tears,
and the wind ruffled my disheveled hair.


Many a Time I shivered, and cried in distress,
in the cold gloom devoid of delight,
Only the harsh truth or is brought me to my knees
And there I would whisper in prayer
That would be carried by the waves down the Pier


And in the silence, I'd hear a gentle sigh
A reminder that darkness precedes the light of day
The stars would twinkle, a celestial show
And in their light, I'd find a glimmer of hope to hold


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