I will judge your book by its cover (pic, title, blurb and maybe few pages) –– CLOSED. Please check another community service convicts

Bimbanana

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How did you know? I don't think I've mentioned anything that could've hinted at that.
Your latin translation and the mood you set on your cover. How's that for my deduction skill? muahahaha.

revolves around the two protagonists and the difference in their personalities and worldview.
This is your cue. Lean into the contradiction between the two + the world situation = TROUBLE.
Now that's your recipe for the synopsis.



Not comedy, but try mine. Had to make the cover myself and I think it turned out alright. My biggest weakness is description and one-line paragraphs for sure. Other than that, tear it apart, thanks!
Ok... Mr. Sike....

1. Title: The ":" is buggering me. Why not just Project Psychic? Its still have the same meaning on english, no?

2. Cover: Is good! did you made it yourself? Although it'll be better without the entity and its claw. Dont worry, it still give the mystery psychic vibe even without the entity.

3. Blurb: Huh? That's it? I think that's better to be your first paragraph of your synopsis. You need to continue telling more.

4. Storywise: Your layout is terrible. The spacing are too much, the words are too few.
Oh hey, another dialogue heavy author like me. nice-nice.
Oh, its Dandadan but not too unhinged

Summary: Ok here's the thing. Your story is intriguing, your delivery is good. characters also pretty good. All ruined because of the packaging (the paragraph spacing are too much). Yes you use ai as your editor, but please always be the final editor of your ai editor. And yes, im saying this while looking at the mirror.

erdict:
Cover: 8. I'll give you 10 if you erase the entity and the claw
Blurb: 3 (come on, put some more)
Title: 3 (Seriously, your story deserve a better title)
Early chapters: 4 because of the paragraph layout. 8 or maybe 9 after you fixing it

Thank you, next....
phew... man this is actually tiring.
I haven’t published it yet and I don't have a cover (yet).
Title: The Truth is Mysterious
Fire. Screams.

"You shall perish in the deepest of hells!"

"These rat-bloods!"

"Disgrace to the magical society!"

Black mist. Everything went blank for some time.

"What"s happening?"



Iris woke up with a start, sweating. The skin around where her pendant was touching burned. Another weird dream, she thought to herself. But soon she shook it off and went to wash up. It was a long day ahead.



Iris went to the dining hall in her regular corset to find everyone except for Harlin, who was obviously busy doing her makeup.



Iris sat down beside Elina and nudged her with her elbow.



"I will ask Mother and Father now, okay?" Eli nodded. Aylin looked at Iris from the other side of the dining table in a meaningful way and nodded.



"Mother, Father, are you aware that we are going on an expedition tomorrow?"Iris said. Queen Eleeza slightly frowned her eyebrows.



"I think not. Where are you going?"



"We are visiting Raczil to look at what the war has left behind."



"I see you are interested in war, my dear," King Franks said, his reddish eyes sparkling.



"I'm so proud of you." Iris nodded and smiled. Harlin had entered the dining hall by then. She looked frantically at the others and bowed deeply, "I apologize for delaying my arrival."



Elina mocked her, "No need to be so polite, Late Queen. We know your makeup takes more time than your breakfast."



"That"s normal though." They kept bickering.



After breakfast,



All four of them were walking down the hall towards their classroom.



"Don"t you think they will find out?"asked Harlin, slightly frowning.



"Well, we gotta risk it, girl. We just have to act well enough for them not to find out," said Elina, slowing down to match her pace.



"It"s not just acting though. If Mr. Rupert tells Mrs. Eleejah, we are doomed. We have to make sure our plan works out," Aylin said, looking kind of worried.



"Iris?"Aylin said as she pulled Iris by her arm, "Is there anything on your mind?"



"Yes, you have been really silent," Elina mocked her.



"Actually, yes. I had this weird dream this morning and I can"t just forget what happened."



"Haven’t you been having way too many nightmares lately?" Aylin looked worried.



"Did I tell you it was a nightmare?"



"I can tell," she smiled warmly, "now, tell us what you dreamt about."



"It felt as if I had seen that dream before. Or, more like, I was there myself. It felt very tangible."



"Was it the same thing you saw last time?"



"Nope. Last time, I couldn’t exactly remember what I saw; it was vague. But it was really clear this time. I saw that some people were being burnt in the city plaza. The crowd was chanting insults at them. And everything was covered in black mist. I felt as if I were present in that dream."



"That"s spooky. Maybe you should consult the psychologist," Harlin suggested.



"Hey, I'm not going insane. I don’t need a psychologist."



They arrived at their classroom. They walked into the classroom. Wind blew in through the floor to ceiling windows and the chirping of birds filled the air with a nice vibe.



There were not many students as usual. Well, it was normal because, of course, the princesses of four of the most powerful kingdoms wouldn’t sit in the same classroom as others. They attend special magic classes meant only for them. They learn how to hone their basic magic skills; for example, they learn to talk to birds, how to fly, and how to teleport. But all of them have a long way to go before they can become experts like their parents.



"Hey, Irees. Have you read that book yet?"asked Alison walking up to them.



"Yes, I have. It was so good. I loved the details about the war. It"s interesting."



"I knew you would love it," Alison warmly smiled at her.



Eleena rolled her eyes, "There he goes again with his sweet tongue." Harleen smirked, "Or are you jealous that he doesn’t use that sweet tongue while speaking to you?" Elina cursed at her, "I would rather have a dog lick me in the face than be jealous of him. Ew,"she crinkled her nose, "I guess you should work a little harder on your makeup though."



Harlin grinned as she sat at her desk, "Even though I wouldn’t mind if he admires me, personally my standard is way too high." Elina rolled her eyes. Irees continued her chatter with Alison as Ayleen sat between Elina and Harlin.



"Will you two stop your dogfighting?"Aylin said, brushing a strand of hair from her face.



"Oh, mother! Please forgive us for such brusqueness. We shall never disappoint you again." Elina said, mockingly pleading to Aylin. Aylin pursed her lips.



"I'm not your mother."



"But you sure don"t let me feel the absence of my mother." Harlin burst out laughing. But just then Mr. Rupert entered the classroom.



"Okay, everyone, sit down. Mr. Alison, why are you standing at Ms. Iris"s desk?"



Alison hurried away.



"So, today we are going to learn about the history of the fall of the wizard kingdom."



...



Later that afternoon,



"We should pack for tomorrow," Harlin said taking a sip from the golden trimmed pink tea cup.



"What are you gonna pack? Makeup kit?" Elina asked as she munched on her apple pie, Cathyon sitting on her lap as she played with her brown hair.



"You know the answer, Eli. By the way, aren’t you gonna pack some food for you?"



"Oh, thanks for the reminder! I gotta ask Brandy for some snacks to carry."



Iris was there reading a book called 'War and Runes', too intent on reading to notice the bickering.



Aylin sat there quietly sipping tea and adoring the beauty of her favourite flowers— violet, iris and whatnot. The western wind was tender against her pale skin. The cool bridge carried the smell of flowers into the tea pavilion.

...

1. Title: Oh? is this a netflix romcom?

2. Cover:

3. Blurb:

4. Storywise: Okay, it seems you care about your characters, its good. Their personality also diverse enough, that's good. Just lacking details on the setting and worldbuilding.

5. Hooks? Oh please dont let your chapter 1 end there. There's not enough hook. I mean its about to getting on the hook, but you stop it several meters away.
 
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AliceMoonvale

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Aight girl, here's for the story.

1. Title: Its okay, i guess... but i personally feel the title on your cover would be a better choice, because... i just feel it.

2. Cover: Good good. The theme and what's this about are conveyed properly. Only lacking a unicorn sticker or a blob

3. Blurb: It's not bad but somehow can be better also. I mean yes, i get it, gen-z without phone is disastrous, but you spend half your blurb emphasising that is a bit of waste of words. But then again, i also havent got the idea what can be made better.

4. Storywise: Ok, here goes. You staying true with your journal style. words are shorts, something that someone will write to be read by herself. The world, the tense, everything's all good.
Honestly, you got all the materials one can expect from zombie post-apocalypse shit. The main concern is your packaging. You package it as a journal, written fully like a journal. Is that wrong? no. Is that sellable? only to niche market.

Well up to you what you want to aim i guess. But if you want more readers, maybe you can make the prose longer either being more descriptive maybe? Something that can make readers be more immersed with a style that NOT neccesarily betraying your journal writing style.

I also wonder if making your chapters longer will make it better? Such as merging chapter 1 and 2, and so on. Because if i'm engaged with your story, i would complained since you making your chapters shorts while you only post once/week (well not going to complain directly, only quietly move on and read something else). Does this makes any sense? oh my god its so hot today i can't think, i need ice cream

Verdict:
Cover: 10
Blurb: 6
Title: 7. (would be 9 if you use the one in your cover)
Early chapters: Personally? 9. Packaging wise? 5

Love yah kitty cat! keep on writing, rhyming, cursing, and everything!

Ayyy thanks for the double attention~ I appreciate it
:blob_shade:

The journal format is a deliberate, niche choice, since I’m aiming for something that feels like an actual journal someone would write in during the apocalypse and not the normal/traditional novel. If I were to start stretching entries or adding more “novel-style” prose just for immersion, I think it'd lose authenticity pretty fast. So, I'm straight up doubling down on my niche and keeping the pacing consistent with the format, rather than writing overly detailed, multi-day essay pages. Especially since I take inspiration from the Dear America diary book series I used to love as a kid.

That said, yeah, the synopsis could be tweaked, might try and do that. For SH, I leaned more into experimental journal voice, but it has a more novel-coded version on RR. And maaaybe I'll consider changing my title to something like 'This Is How I Lived; Please don't read, It's mine', but idk. The cover title doesn't make a good title on it's own imo. It’s pulled directly from my MC's voice early on and ties into where her character ends up later. I meant for it to feel personal and a little off, like you’re reading something you weren’t supposed to find. (we love foreshadowing)

Glad the voice landed though, since she is the story. lmao
Thank you~
 

Bimbanana

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Whenever you have time I would love to hear your feedback! ☮️


Okay, next is... Miss Cookiez is it?

1. Storywise: Okay i'm going to start with story first this time. Because here's the thing. After skimread it a little bit, i would say: Your story is good! damn good that i would like to read it if im not busy. So im going to give my personal input for everything on the sake of your story. please bear with me.

2. Cover: pic is good, but its warped a bit. you need to fix the resolution. Also you need the title included on the pic please.

3. Title: With that kind of story that you made? I'm sorry but you just degrading your own story. Its like you renamed Aretha Franklin into Megan Thee Stallion. Yes, you want to make it more sellable, but i think there's a better way to do that.

4. Blurb: This one is a betrayal. Your lore, your worldbuilding, your characters, are intigruing. But you didnt show that. The highligh of your blurb are their age, their job, what their job is, what magesmith is. What you representing here are technical stuff, and you even explain what those technical stuff are, on your blurb!
No, that's not the right approach! Go more political here! Go with the racism! go with the struggles! Go black and point that Yes, even with monsters around, racism is the main problem! Point that out!

5. Market: Ok here's the thing (based on my amateur marketing skill): You are in a confusing situation. Your story is too heavy for those casual litrpg peeps in here or RR. But the mature readers who digs your kind of story will also be confused with your litrpg system (assuming most of them doesnt play games).
Where you should position yourself? Maybe just go straight and true to the niche market, and focused on there. Blast every chapters to every novel sites. Tiring? yes. But then again niche people are minority and scattered on every sites. Put more chapters ahead on RR. And maybe also kindle?

I did said i'm only interested on comedy, but doesnt mean i have blind eyes toward good political and humanity issues.

I'm not going to give you those verdict points because those are just playing things, and i'm genuinely scared to give your story a wrong score.

Good luck and godspeed sister.
 
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Bimbanana

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Next is... Mr. Harry

1. Title: Good, remind me of rpg games title

2. Cover: Awww, so cute and wholesome... please dont let this be a trap of smut or tragic story

3. Blurb: Its great. It makes me care for the mc, i know the world and the lore. good job

4. Storywise: Ah yes yes, as expected. Very wholesome.
Awww, those chapters sketches also cute

Summary: Ok here's the problem. All good but except one thing. The paragraphs are uneven. At the beginning the prose are plenty and lengthy and nice. And then it becames shorter and shorter. And then it became wordy again. and short again. This is usually the problem with ai editor. As usual, you need to be the final editor for your ai editor.

Everything else is good. Not my cup of tea but yes its cute and wholesome
Sure, hit me! Not a comedy mind, so if you skip for that fair enough :D

Huh? this dude profile suddenly disabled. Oh well, was about to reject his fanfic anyway
mmmmmmmm.... naah you dont need it.
This novel is already way up there.


Alright then thank you everyone for visiting.
My probation is over and im going back to my normal life now.

Toodle dooo~
 
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Cookiez_N_Potionz

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Okay, next is... Miss Cookiez is it?

1. Storywise: Okay i'm going to start with story first this time. Because here's the thing. After skimread it a little bit, i would say: Your story is good! damn good that i would like to read it if im not busy. So im going to give my personal input for everything on the sake of your story. please bear with me.

2. Cover: pic is good, but its warped a bit. you need to fix the resolution. Also you need the title included on the pic please.

3. Title: With that kind of story that you made? I'm sorry but you just degrading your own story. Its like you renamed Aretha Franklin into Megan Thee Stallion. Yes, you want to make it more sellable, but i think there's a better way to do that.

4. Blurb: This one is a betrayal. Your lore, your worldbuilding, your characters, are intigruing. But you didnt show that. The highligh of your blurb are their age, their job, what their job is, what magesmith is. What you representing here are technical stuff, and you even explain what those technical stuff are, on your blurb!
No, that's not the right approach! Go more political here! Go with the racism! go with the struggles! Go black and point that Yes, even with monsters around, racism is the main problem! Point that out!

5. Market: Ok here's the thing (based on my amateur marketing skill): You are in a confusing situation. Your story is too heavy for those casual litrpg peeps in here or RR. But the mature readers who digs your kind of story will also be confused with your litrpg system (assuming most of them doesnt play games).
Where you should position yourself? Maybe just go straight and true to the niche market, and focused on there. Blast every chapters to every novel sites. Tiring? yes. But then again niche people are minority and scattered on every sites. Put more chapters ahead on RR. And maybe also kindle?

I did said i'm only interested on comedy, but doesnt mean i have blind eyes toward good political and humanity issues.

I'm not going to give you those verdict points because those are just playing things, and i'm genuinely scared to give your story a wrong score.

Good luck and godspeed sister.

Thank you very much for the encouraging advice, Bim! ❤️
 

Nevafrost

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1. Title: Oh? is this a netflix romcom?
Hey! Anything but shitflix. I would never let them do anything to my baby novel.
4. Storywise: Okay, it seems you care about your characters, its good. Their personality also diverse enough, that's good. Just lacking details on the setting and worldbuilding.
This is the first time someone mentioned that I care about my characters. I'm touched :blob_happy:. Because all the characters are inspired by my best friends and me.
Also, I finished planning the whole story but I just don't know how to put them in words.
5. Hooks? Oh please dont let your chapter 1 end there. There's not enough hook. I mean its about to getting on the hook, but you stop it several meters away.

Actually, I haven’t finished writing this chapter yet :blob_evil_two:. I just couldn’t help begging for a review and feedback lol.
 
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