I need a little help:)

Scaver

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So I was about to write a chapter. But the thing is this is a memory? My story is in first person perspective and even in this scene we will be following the mc's view. But now, mc was seeing things from a certain characters eye and that itself is a memory. Basically, mc is seeing things but from a chracters body which is just a memory.
Now, the problem is I dont know how to write it. Like for example:
“A-aunty Betty!” A coarse voice came out of my mouth.
Am I supposed to refer it with the character's name or as Mc? Of course, mc here cann't do anything but think, so there is internal monologue with 'I'
 

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maybe refer to it as "this body's mouth" or something, make it like the character is being puppeted
 
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So I was about to write a chapter. But the thing is this is a memory? My story is in first person perspective and even in this scene we will be following the mc's view. But now, mc was seeing things from a certain characters eye and that itself is a memory. Basically, mc is seeing things but from a chracters body which is just a memory.
Now, the problem is I dont know how to write it. Like for example:

Am I supposed to refer it with the character's name or as Mc? Of course, mc here cann't do anything but think, so there is internal monologue with 'I'
You could actually do either way.
“A-aunty Betty!” A coarse voice came out of my mouth.
This makes it seem like the MC is more connected to her as if they are experiencing it in real time. If you put "A coarse voice came out of her mouth", it would make it seem more distant.
maybe refer to it as "this body's mouth" or something, make it like the character is being puppeted
Or you can do it as HelloHound said. Without more context it is hard to know.
 

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maybe refer to it as "this body's mouth" or something, make it like the character is being puppeted
They know the character. Like Mc is seeing the past of the character through a memory.
 

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if the scenario is happening as viewing a memory of a powerful being as an inheritance or something .. then change the wording as such. viewpoints matter as telling about something to viewers about what happened use past tense.. but if you wanna show it as if you are taking viewers with you and they are also seeing it use present tense.. :blob_popcorn:
 
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