Blue09o
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its been a while since i post a thread anyway once again if i put this in the wrong place im sorry anyways
i got a pretty interesting idea for a book heres the story
basically you got a family of 5 a pair of parent and 3 children our protag here is the youngest
the prolouge start at a rooftop of a building.
the child ( the youngest ) stand at the edge with his/her family behind, they scream for the child not to do it
the child turned around and here ill refeal the conflic that maked the child to be here and that is broken home or a broken family
one by one the child adresses their family members from the older sister of bulying, the older brother of ignorance, the dad of abuse and finally the mom of too much expetations, here when the child adresses the mom they also refeal a saying she said that makes the child have a resolve to be here
"mom do you remember what you said long ago 'why do you have to do something like this, what you want to do something to make me happy, you only caused trouble for me, i would be happier if you werent here to begin with' "
for the child that hasnt felt a singgle sense of belonging in home what the cild wanted the most is to prove themself to the family to make the family happy the child want to make them smile cause of the child but years have passed and the child have not sucseed at all
thus the child jump. all the family screamed they ran to try and grasp the childs hand (they stayed far from the child cause of plot purpose)
time skip to after funreal all the family dressed in black is down crying in front of the childs grave while theres a thunderstorm. not long ago they have realized their mistakes in the family the pain they have caused only to the youngest child, by the time they realized their mistake its alredy too late when all of them want to apologize to the child they does not see the child anywhere instead a note in the mom's room saying that the family can smile brightly again thus from that note they ended up in the roof top of a building
in the grave one by one expresses their apologies and mistake after that every family member seemed to thing of the same exaxt thing "god if youre out there i wish to fix the mistake of the past " right after that a thunder strike the family prolouge end
from the prolouge it seems that it doesnt really explain what the story will be about it just filled with edgy depression now that i realize it anyway.
this story will basically be the slice of life story of a family thats trying to fix their past mistake after the thunder strike the family they realized that they have retuned to the past all of them retain the memories before the thunderstrike yet none of them know that everyone knows the past events even the child, the child realized that they have gone back to the past seeing this the child not afraid by the future event that happen in the past(before the last incident) instead taked this as another chance thus the child dedicate this time to works harder
there will be 3 protag (the children) while the parets will just be a suporting char.
i like writing, i really do, i know the "last updated 4 moths" of my novel said otherwise but theres a reason.
as a non native english speaker the biggest hurdle that im currently experiencing is words i can have the scenario clear in my head yet choosing and finding the words to describe that is hard. too hard. for example when making a fight schene i got the fight in my head clear but finding the word that can describe that fight clearly and clean took me too long to the point that the image in my head is filled with words and gone.
i got the same problem with this story idea i got the story in my head all clear all the scenario and emotion the child feels as the child adresses the family member but i cant find the word to convey that emotion in a readable way, i cant find any words that i can use to make reader can feel and imagine the emotion that the child feels and tried to convey to the family
anyway thats all if you got any tips for beginer writers that have problem like mine please tell me i would greatly apreciate it anyway thanks for reading this have a good day
i got a pretty interesting idea for a book heres the story
basically you got a family of 5 a pair of parent and 3 children our protag here is the youngest
the prolouge start at a rooftop of a building.
the child ( the youngest ) stand at the edge with his/her family behind, they scream for the child not to do it
the child turned around and here ill refeal the conflic that maked the child to be here and that is broken home or a broken family
one by one the child adresses their family members from the older sister of bulying, the older brother of ignorance, the dad of abuse and finally the mom of too much expetations, here when the child adresses the mom they also refeal a saying she said that makes the child have a resolve to be here
"mom do you remember what you said long ago 'why do you have to do something like this, what you want to do something to make me happy, you only caused trouble for me, i would be happier if you werent here to begin with' "
for the child that hasnt felt a singgle sense of belonging in home what the cild wanted the most is to prove themself to the family to make the family happy the child want to make them smile cause of the child but years have passed and the child have not sucseed at all
thus the child jump. all the family screamed they ran to try and grasp the childs hand (they stayed far from the child cause of plot purpose)
time skip to after funreal all the family dressed in black is down crying in front of the childs grave while theres a thunderstorm. not long ago they have realized their mistakes in the family the pain they have caused only to the youngest child, by the time they realized their mistake its alredy too late when all of them want to apologize to the child they does not see the child anywhere instead a note in the mom's room saying that the family can smile brightly again thus from that note they ended up in the roof top of a building
in the grave one by one expresses their apologies and mistake after that every family member seemed to thing of the same exaxt thing "god if youre out there i wish to fix the mistake of the past " right after that a thunder strike the family prolouge end
from the prolouge it seems that it doesnt really explain what the story will be about it just filled with edgy depression now that i realize it anyway.
this story will basically be the slice of life story of a family thats trying to fix their past mistake after the thunder strike the family they realized that they have retuned to the past all of them retain the memories before the thunderstrike yet none of them know that everyone knows the past events even the child, the child realized that they have gone back to the past seeing this the child not afraid by the future event that happen in the past(before the last incident) instead taked this as another chance thus the child dedicate this time to works harder
there will be 3 protag (the children) while the parets will just be a suporting char.
i like writing, i really do, i know the "last updated 4 moths" of my novel said otherwise but theres a reason.
as a non native english speaker the biggest hurdle that im currently experiencing is words i can have the scenario clear in my head yet choosing and finding the words to describe that is hard. too hard. for example when making a fight schene i got the fight in my head clear but finding the word that can describe that fight clearly and clean took me too long to the point that the image in my head is filled with words and gone.
i got the same problem with this story idea i got the story in my head all clear all the scenario and emotion the child feels as the child adresses the family member but i cant find the word to convey that emotion in a readable way, i cant find any words that i can use to make reader can feel and imagine the emotion that the child feels and tried to convey to the family
anyway thats all if you got any tips for beginer writers that have problem like mine please tell me i would greatly apreciate it anyway thanks for reading this have a good day
