Help with Sypnosis.

AncestorDuck

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Hello, my favorite community! Today, I want to upload the first few chapters of my new novel. It's a comedy, slice-of-life, cultivation story.

I’d love to get your opinion on my synopsis. Do you think it fits the vibe of a comedy novel?

Thank you in advance!

And a special shoutout to all entities who identify as ducks.

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I just wanted to slurp my instant noodles and enjoy another trashy series, that’s all I was looking forward to. But instead, I got kidnapped. Then, I died. That's what I remember, at least.

But hey, I didn't stay dead. Somehow, I got reincarnated into the body of a young master of the Rainbow Sect. The problem? He was your typical arrogant, spoiled young master.

A guy with a ridiculously inflated ego who loved flaunting his power and wealth. So, yeah, not exactly a great deal for me. Instead of waiting for my inevitable doom, I decided to take matters into my own hands. I wasn't about to play the part of some arrogant, entitled brat. I wasn't going to fight other geniuses, and I sure as hell wasn't going to waste my time trying to reach the top in some ridiculous power struggle.

Nope. I was done with that nonsense.

So, I fled. I ran as far away as I could and found myself a nice, quiet life... cultivating herbs in the peace and solitude of my own little garden. Who needs to challenge the heavens when you can grow your own food in peace?

Farming was where the real satisfaction was for me. Fighting, scheming, and trying to outsmart everyone? Not my thing. But growing the perfect batch of herbs?

Now that was a true art.
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This is a slice-of-life series, where a lazy dude just wants to stay out of the power struggle. I ain't no pro or anything, and honestly, this is the first time I’ve written a novel. I'm also a potato, and not a gun owner, so English ain't my mother tongue. But don't worry, I went to school, and it wasn’t an art one.
 

SwallowForm

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Synopsis isn't bad but isn't good either. It describes what is the story but based on the description I didn't read anything that stood out. The setting is a basic template with common tropes, but you haven't emphasized any points I thought would have elevated your story.
Also the writing style didn't appeal to me in comedic sense. It felt like you were lampshading too hard so the casual tone you're using to pursue comedy comes across stale.

And a special shoutout to all entities who identify as ducks.
What about swallows?
I'm also a potato, and not a gun owner, so English ain't my mother tongue.
Oh? You speak English? Name every firearm. I will now ask this to any American I meet.
 

CharlesEBrown

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Oh? You speak English? Name every firearm. I will now ask this to any American I meet.
That one's Bob. The one over there is Dave. That one on the wall is Sarah. We call this happy little fellow Dan - he's got a bit of a kick.
 

miyoga

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Sarah isn't allowed off the wall anymore after she accidentally blew three loads into my waifu.
And this little guy is Junior. He might only shoot BBs now, but he'll be a big boy someday.
Over there we've got Jenny. She's spent after one round, but still nice to have her around.
 
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