First time here, would dearly like any feed back.

[Somberpony]

writing for nano. Suffocating. Would like some air.

Noir Fantasy

Chapter 1: An offer you can’t refuse. “I am Seleina Holyblade. I was a crusader for the Holy Church of Light. I have slain demons, devils, and monstrous beasts all in the pursuit of protecting humanity!” I said in a rush as my hand clenched the phone, making the plastic crackle under my grip. ...

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[Assurbanipal_II]

writing for nano. Suffocating. Would like some air.

Noir Fantasy

Chapter 1: An offer you can’t refuse. “I am Seleina Holyblade. I was a crusader for the Holy Church of Light. I have slain demons, devils, and monstrous beasts all in the pursuit of protecting humanity!” I said in a rush as my hand clenched the phone, making the plastic crackle under my grip. ...

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My first impression ...

Noir fantasy ...

Holy Church of Light ...

Something is definitely wrong here.

 

[Somberpony]

Well, the rest of the paragraph might explain more.

 

[Sabruness]

@Somberpony
Gave a quick squiz of the first 2 and a bit chapters. Objectively, just from what you've done so far it's interesting and there's enough things hinted at to stoke curiosity.

What tags and genres would this story entail?

 

[ChronicleCrawler]

writing for nano. Suffocating. Would like some air.

Noir Fantasy

Chapter 1: An offer you can’t refuse. “I am Seleina Holyblade. I was a crusader for the Holy Church of Light. I have slain demons, devils, and monstrous beasts all in the pursuit of protecting humanity!” I said in a rush as my hand clenched the phone, making the plastic crackle under my grip. ...

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Your writing is already quite neat in my eyes. It's interesting and a good read for me. Just like @Sabruness, I'm rather curious about the genre of the story prolly because its title is noir fantasy.