Hi everyone,
I’m looking for technical and narrative feedback on my first web novel, Heroes of the Abyss: Zero
In a world of concrete triangles and magic-infused mud, Zero is born at the point of maximum pressure: Sector Z, Block 17. In this system, you are either a useful cog or biological waste (NIL). Zero has no magic, no skills, and no destiny. He only has his brain, sharpened by a mind that broke long ago under the weight of an indifferent world.
English is not my primary language. I use AI as a way to translate my original italian novel, but I still personally review every chapter with a friend of mine
The character’s mental breakdown and his "logic-first" survival mechanism are not random, they are grounded in real world, from my therapy sessions
There are currently 13 chapter out (12 + 0)
I will appreciate every feedback no matter how harsh, thanks a lot in advance
Heroes of the Abyss: Zero
I’m looking for technical and narrative feedback on my first web novel, Heroes of the Abyss: Zero
In a world of concrete triangles and magic-infused mud, Zero is born at the point of maximum pressure: Sector Z, Block 17. In this system, you are either a useful cog or biological waste (NIL). Zero has no magic, no skills, and no destiny. He only has his brain, sharpened by a mind that broke long ago under the weight of an indifferent world.
English is not my primary language. I use AI as a way to translate my original italian novel, but I still personally review every chapter with a friend of mine
The character’s mental breakdown and his "logic-first" survival mechanism are not random, they are grounded in real world, from my therapy sessions
There are currently 13 chapter out (12 + 0)
I will appreciate every feedback no matter how harsh, thanks a lot in advance
Heroes of the Abyss: Zero