Feedback on my comedy story please

[CZ2]

I’m The Goddess of Doctors, So Why Are All Of My Patients Idiots?!

My name is Ariel and I’m the Goddess of Doctors and a real Doctor myself, I was content as my job as Goddess all but until I actually became a Goddess. Every patient that comes in is dysfunctional in their own way. “-Can I touch you?” “-Please step on...

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[2021]

Maybe my ears aren't working, did he say something like: 'Can I feel up your rests?'


you miss spelt that

 

[CZ2]

Maybe my ears aren't working, did he say something like: 'Can I feel up your rests?'


you miss spelt that

She was deluding herself, thinking that he couldn't have said "breasts" but "rests" instead.

 

[Mysticant]

I like the idea, but I want to know where will you be going and how long it will be. Cause plain comedy without any advancement of plot and other characters sounds like a single man slapstick comedy to me.