Dystopian Scene

bulmabriefs144

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I read this from Matched, describing a "romantic meal out,"
The simulated candle flickers around a round black metal table in front of me. No tablecloths, and the food is regulation food - we'd eat the same food here that we'd eat at home. That's why it's necessary to book in advance, so the nutrition personnel can get your food to the right spot.
and decided on this topic. Basically, come up with a paragraph or longer that completely captures how fucked up a society is. Bonus points if you make it sound positive.

I'll try...

They called it Social Capitalism. It was short for Socialist Capitalism, having been formed after Civil War II between the middle of America and the edges. The people in small towns wanted to work for their money, people in big cities wanted socialism. After an extended conflict between rural and urban areas, a fair truce was made, one that everyone could agree with. All people would be guaranteed free housing and medicine, and it was your right to work as much as you wanted. In exchange, everyone who made more than $20,000 a year would be expected to pay 35% tax on their profits in order to help the struggling. In addition, if you were self-employed, you were expected to pay this tax again as an employee. Truly, this was a progressive system that helped the less fortunate. But this had a second reason for its name. You see, gone were gold and silver, or even paper money. These things were obsolete now. Instead, Facebook, Twitter, Discord, and all the rest consolidated into a single social network, and we knew it ran well because it was run by the government. Under SameChat, everyone had a fair stake socially. If you worked hard, your social currency went up (before taxes of course, where it was donated to help the needy), and I imagine you were able to afford luxury foods and fabulous vacations. But you could also be paid just for having plenty of likes online. Of course, there were people who got unliked, anything from jaywalking to dressing wrong to simply trolling SameChat. But the less that can be said of such antisocial people the better. They got what they deserved.

(So yeah, social credit system, 70% self-employment tax while people who are friendly but don't work get free money, and people are put to death for having mean tweets)
 

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They called it Generative Artificial Intelligence. It was heralded as the one technology that would end all inequalities, capable of bringing equal quality content of all kinds to everyone. Without discrimination, it learned from everyone, and their creators chose from the best to give to society only the best as well. People could now count with the help of personal assistants, capable of completing tasks that before would have taken several people. These, in turn, had the time to better themselves in a more fulfilling task, dedicating themselves to such things as interloping passer byes and inquiring if they desired to be taken leave of their belongings through words and gestures of effect, asking for means of existence not because they really had a need to but because they now could, or more developed means of creative endeavours which tried to syphon into the never ending wealth that society had developed. Ahh, the joy of living during these poignant and memorable times!
 

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I read this from Matched, describing a "romantic meal out,"

and decided on this topic. Basically, come up with a paragraph or longer that completely captures how fucked up a society is. Bonus points if you make it sound positive.

I'll try...



(So yeah, social credit system, 70% self-employment tax while people who are friendly but don't work get free money, and people are put to death for having mean tweets)
The children stacked up their toy blocks, giggling happily. A girl leaned on her tippy toes with a mischievous smile, sticking a white block atop of the messy, haphazard tower. With a click of hard surface against hard surface, she fell onto the wet ground giggling, light brown pigtails jangling. She tugs at the next piece, though it is super stuck like all of the other ones.

In the playground that is the beach, two young boys chased each other around the lot, laughing all the while. The first boy, a mischievous little squirt with a buzz-cut, stumbles through the pale-tansand of the beach. "Can't get me," he shouts, even as he pushes himself up from a fall with tired arms, black hands contrasting the lightly-colored sand particles.
The other boy is right behind him though, his freckled cheeks in a big ol' smirk. The other boy brushes his shaggy mullet out of his face, and says "Iiii'm going to get you!"
"Nuh-uh!" the squirt says back.
The other boy's feet can be heard squelching much faster, toes easily finding traction in dark red mud as he runs right behind the stumbling kid.

A few other kids, a trio of toddlers times three, sit on their mother's laps. They are extremely hungry, but mom's a little distracted. Thankfully for them, they find some food mom squirreled away.
The pigtailed girl making her block tower was finally able to tug free the next piece thanks to the toddlers.

A bunch of teenagers asleep on the many slides all around the vast playground get their buttcheeks played with like drums.

"Haven't they heard of beds?" a gremlin of a girl giggles to her similarly musically-inclined friends. All of them had callouses from playing so long!
"We're going to set a world record for longest buttdrumming, right guys?" the blond-haired six year old follows up behind his ten thousandth sibling, cheering her and rest of his siblings on.
The ten or so nod affirmatively, wiping the suuuper blistered palms off on their jeans, and the snoozing teenagers shorts, and anywhere they can get their icky hands aaall clean! They shiver in disgust, prancing around but laughing at each other all the same in youthful camaraderie. The girl chortles especially loudly at the kids with white shirts now unfortunately stained yellow. Her dreadlocks bounce like rubber, thick, white balls strung like beads keeping the braids pretty.
The moist, large spheres had shiny, pretty rings and very red things inside of them, and made a funky, funny thudding against each other when she moved! It was funny!

A class clown of a brother joked that his oldest sibling "lent him a hand. But he would much rather his big sister lend him an ear."
His twin brother, no sense of humor - LOL! - gave him his olive-toned ear.
They paused, and looked at each other...
Laughter resounded in their plastic tunnel, an echoey part of the playset that was super fun to say "HELLO!, HeLLo! hello! hello. hellooo...."
... It didn't actually make any echoes, but it was fun to pretend it was a cave! The pitter-patter of blood helped add to the ambiance, like dripping water! They were super adorable when they did it too!

The class clown left the tunnel and twin at top speed, holding a bunch of squiggly things in his hand.
"HAHA! ~ I GOT YOUR NOSE AND YOUR TOES AND EVERYTHING BELOWS!" he sang, jumping over a series of people sleeping face-first in the sand. A fleet of kids had arranged the naughty parents into an obstacle course.
"Giiive theeeem baaaack!" cried the twin. "Mooooom!" he calls out, sounding like he had gargled sticky slime. Must have been all of the liquid running down his face. He finds her.
"He stole my-" he sniffs "-he stole m-my ears... and my nose...-" he sniffs again, snot escaping his face "-and everyth-th-thing belows." A shuddering breath moves his tiny frame, followed by a minor fit of choking on all of the liquid pouring from every facial orifice.
"And-and-and..." he ashamedly starts "he-he-he-" a huge sniffle but the gushing doesn't stop "-made me wet myself." A big stain on his swim shorts is evident, and red liquid pours down the inside of his shorts.
"It's n-not my fault though. He stole everything belows," he says confidently.
He shuffles in the red mud.
"Mom?"
 

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When Lyla arrived at school, she took her shoes off, placed them in the bins, and gave her backpack to the officer on duty. When it was clear she had neither contraband nor weapons, she was waved through.

She was stopped by the Guidance Counselor, Mrs. Brown, in the halls lined with gum wads and condoms. “Visit me during your lunch period.”

Lyla pulled a face, “Why?”

“You submitted your Future Plans form. It says you’d like to go to college.”

“I do.” Lyla said.

The Guidance Counselor frowned. Children from this school did not go to college. “Lyla,” she sighed, “Some people just aren’t meant for college.”

Lyla shifted uncomfortably under Mrs. Brown’s gaze, “But how else can I make money?”

Mrs. Brown scoffed, “Go to work, of course. You can find a job if you try.”

Lyla narrowed her eyes. Right. Work. Not the kind that will allow you to make a living, but the kind that will use you up and spit you out. Lyla understood. Mrs. Brown was being clear—Lyla had not been born to live, she’d been born to serve.

Mrs. Brown was still talking, “Your scores indicate that you could be a bus driver.”

Lyla sighed, “I want—“

“What’s wrong with being a bus driver?!” Mrs. Brown asked, incredulous. “Do you think you’re better then a bus driver? Your parents never went to college, are you better then them?”

Lyla went quiet, no longer listening. This was how all adults were. It was better to let them talk.
 
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A long time ago, humanity believed that competition trumped cooperation. Even now in their death throes, they still do. They thought a free, unregulated market would allow economies to boom, countries to flourish, and the genesis of a beautiful civilization birthed by a wellspring of brilliant minds forged through competitive spirit.

They were wrong.
 

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You wake up, go to work, be understaffed and underpaid, get told by boss to work harder, go home, sit and do practically nothing for a couple of hours, eat, take medicine, and then try to sleep.

It is your day off. You decide to go see family. You get to your car and hit the road. Your car breaks down. You pay the tow truck $60, and the mechanic $500. You decide to walk home. You wait 5 minutes to cross the free way. You hear someone screaming about aliens over the near deafening sound of the road. The wind blows smoke into your face and you cough. You pass a McDonalds, KFC, Pizza Hut, Starbucks, and a Walmart all while dodging traffic. You reach the residential area. You look at the town park to see it is abandoned and decrepit. You realize that you haven’t seen anyone on the sidewalk your entire walk home. You get home, you scroll on your phone. You text your friends to no response. You go back to scrolling. You must skip lunch and dinner. You start reading history. You laugh at the barbarity of the past. You stare at your wall for a while. You go back to scrolling. Your stomach rumbles. You sigh, take a bath, take your medicine and try to sleep.

You wake up, you text your friends, and brush your teeth. You get a notification, it is a text. Excited, you open your phone ‘Sorry at work can’t talk’. You close your phone and sit on your couch. You stare at the wall for a couple of minutes before opening your phone and reading the news. You laugh when you see the headline ‘Foreign regime arrests journalist for espionage.’. You find a dark humor in the fact that nations of people don’t rise up when they are being abused. You go back to scrolling on your phone. Your stomach cries, 5 hours have passed. You cook a bowl of rice and two eggs. That is all the food you can afford to eat today. You look outside for a moment before eating. When you finish you wash your dishes and go back to scrolling on your phone. You get tired. You take your medicine, and try to sleep.

You wake up, go to work, be understaffed and underpaid, get told by boss to work harder, go home, sit and do practically nothing for a couple of hours, eat, take medicine, and then try to sleep. You wake up, go to work, be understaffed and underpaid, get told by boss to work harder, go home, sit and do practically nothing for a couple of hours, eat, take medicine, and then try to sleep. You wake up, go to work, be understaffed and underpaid, get told by boss to work harder, go home, sit and do practically nothing for a couple of hours, eat, take medicine, and then try to sleep. You wake up, go to work, be understaffed and underpaid, get told by boss to work harder, go home, sit and do practically nothing for a couple of hours, eat, take medicine, and then try to sleep. You wake up, go to work, be understaffed and underpaid, get told by boss to work harder, go home, sit and do practically nothing for a couple of hours, eat, take medicine, and then try to sleep.

You get sick. You sleep your weekend away after retrieving your car from the mechanic. You call in sick. You call in sick, but your boss requires a doctors note for tomorrow. You schedule an appointment. You reach the clinic, pay $80, see the doctor, you have pneumonia. $30 antibiotics. You head home after dropping a doctors note off at your workplace. You call in sick, but your boss says you are fired. You cough for a couple of minutes before thinking ‘At least I live in a free nation, eventually if I work hard I can get rich and never have to work again. This is just a set back, at least I don’t live in a county where I can get arrested for being homeless.’ You search for work, while coughing and sleeping. You text your friends occasionally, but have only got responses like, ‘I hope you feel better soon.’. A week passes, you are down to one meal a day again. Another week passes before you get a callback from McDonalds, your starting wage is less than $8 an hour. Yesterday was your 56th birthday.
 
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