Character Draft: Heroine, Version 1

[Arch9CivilReactor]

It might be a bit quick to make another post after my last one, but I did find the ideas presented to be amusing enough to make me creative. I’ve come up with a female character worthy of being a ‘heroine’ with these ideas that were suggested.

Story Background: A card magic academy that makes students earn their place by constantly testing them. Each student is put into a ‘Squad’ of five that share their fate together. Failure means the entire squad leaves the academy.

Character Draft—

Heroine is a girl who has regressed from the future. She has seen the MC fail in life and eventually become the biggest ‘Calamity’ in the world, and had joined him in his rampage. Her super-powered evil side had revealed countless secrets she wasn’t aware of in the past.

Both of them eventually succeed in destroying the world, but the heroine starts to grow doubt in her decision. In the beginning, the super-powered evil side had taken over and completely devoured her originally spirited personality. She had lost to her inner demon and acted upon her anarchic obsession after being devoured by it.

It took the intense loneliness of an empty world with her unfulfilled desires that even her ‘evil side’ had a change of heart. She used up her ultimate power from the future to reverse time and regress to the past. Finding the MC again.

This time, when he was struggling, she helped him instead of watching him be set up to fail at every opportunity. Now that her ‘evil side’ was on her side and no longer powerful, she had to do something about her ‘partner-in-crime’ of the past.

Killing him or threatening his life might awaken him as a ‘Calamity’ sooner, so she resolves herself to find out a way to separate him from the evil power lurking within him. Investigating him by forming a friendship with him early on.

Her personality would be outwardly naive while inwardly manipulative. The only ‘bad person’ in the squad who had slaughtered many. Subverting the original template she is based on by having her be primarily an evil person trying to be better. A redemption she doesn’t deserve.

I know this is different from making her delusion or act like Deadpool, but the dual personality aspect is retained. Rather than speaking with an alter ego devoted to protecting her, she speaks to the person she was in the alternate future.

The heel-turned super powered evil side being a supporter due to PTSD from a lonely future and longing for connection.

Well, that’s all I got.

What do you guys think?

 

[ACertainPassingUser]

In my opinion, the early days of the heroine should be filled with her feeling the immaturity of our Male MC.

Its like when you look back at your childhood days and feel embarrassed by what you and your classmate is doing.

Please take that into account.

 

[Arch9CivilReactor]

In my opinion, the early days of the heroine should be filled with her feeling the immaturity of our Male MC.

Its like when you look back at your childhood days and feel embarrassed by what you and your classmate is doing.

Please take that into account.

Hmmm… Maybe I should split them into two characters then. The evil side inheriting the traits of ‘being experimented on’ while the girl is just normal. The evil-now-good alter ego choosing to advise her in order to avoid a dead future.

 

[CharlesEBrown]

Hmmm… Maybe I should split them into two characters then. The evil side inheriting the traits of ‘being experimented on’ while the girl is just normal. The evil-now-good alter ego choosing to advise her in order to avoid a dead future.

You could either have this be a background thing - they were split in the past and somehow have to be merged (like the Star Trek episode with Kirk and the Transporter accident) to be "healthy"?

Or could go the other way and something merged them in the past; right now they take (reluctant) turns in "the driver's seat" constantly looking for a way to "go their separate ways"?

In either case, they could see the MC (or KNOW the MC) as the key to their eventual salvation.

 

[Arch9CivilReactor]

You could either have this be a background thing - they were split in the past and somehow have to be merged (like the Star Trek episode with Kirk and the Transporter accident) to be "healthy"?

Or could go the other way and something merged them in the past; right now they take (reluctant) turns in "the driver's seat" constantly looking for a way to "go their separate ways"?

In either case, they could see the MC (or KNOW the MC) as the key to their eventual salvation.

That sounds very interesting as a concept. Will keep that idea in mind while revising her. The ‘split in the past’ thing seems interesting.