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as soon as I get it again I'll try

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New chapter! Ch 6 Torch

Yeah I know I did that a lot, particularily early on. Trying to stamp those out but hard to find them lol.

Will do

fixing some of the spacing, and the one sentence was definitely a run on. Gonna fix "It was perpetual self feeding heat" to "Plasma was a perpetual self feeding heat" just to make it more straightforward. Definitely need more screen time for Rei to flesh her out. She's only got two chapters so...

I'll repost my edits sometime later, a few of the changes are already in my docs it seems.

He was so much fun to write. Also I run a pathfinder/starfinder game based on this setting and he hires a 2nd group(the players) to find this one. He's technically fully off screen for that game but his weak willed brother is eventually present.

Thanks, I struggled a bunch with that first chapter and writing between 1st and 3rd person perspectives, I think my later chapters do a better job at it though. I wanted the writing to have Zarine's own brand of sass behind it, but I can probably do that more with liberal use of italics and her...

neat so far, will probably keep reading

Hey, I'm looking for some feedback or constructive criticism and maybe even discussion on my story to help me maintain motivation. Also wether or not I should add Isekai as one of my tags (for more views). I may also add girls love depending on how my next chapter goes, though unsure yet. Last...