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Needs more emotions. MC feels like a wet plank. It's got the conversation, It's got the descriptions. (y) Needs what the MC is feeling and thinking.

Hmmm...very good advice. Although being stuck in first-person means I can't really go in depth with my other characters internal monologues and emotions...(How do people do that with just facial expression?) I'd probably end the chapter with the character going for a smoke break due to the...

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That's very insightful and actually super helpful with the example... But I guess I can't spam emotions too much, you can only have that much emotions...any other methods? "Emotional depth is not a bottomless well; we must be careful not to draw from it faster than it can refill." - Sudden...

Backlog too large :er_what_s: I have a major problem in which I require readers to point out my mistakes quickly so I can fix them. I can't identify my own issues due to narcissism. *Which of course is a very bad thing Edit : Ok, I remember now that self-loathing is usually quite uncouth, I...

I can't help it. I'm too excited at writing new plots. Edit : Will post less frequently. My posting schedule is messed up.

Sounds good but if I do it too much. I basically have no room for conversations and if I try to find new vocab to describe the environment, it feels like I ate a thesaurus and vomited it back out.

I have no idea what is appealing to the SH audience, I've got the gist that its mostly smut and pretty girl on cover so I've got that covered.

I have found that eventually, as much as you plan. Things would probably slip through and need to be caught embarrassingly by beta-readers. So just don't think of too many info, instead just write an mini end goal that the story would reach in four-five chapters. Then once the goal is...

I realized in my writings, I've managed to write I multiple times per paragraph, I'm also stuck with white room syndrome where I don't describe anything. I can't seem to rid of the "I"s and "Me"s, when I re-read my sentences, it's just I everywhere. Even as I write this sentence, I realize I...

Did not read all the way but it seems like a classic money money romance that people would absolutely devour up. 1. Although the MC seems like a plain Jane for now, I got the visual gist of more MC development 2. Character dynamics seem quite sharp, but characters change emotions quickly. Rose...

1. Slow burn and starting with a war sounds awesome, just make sure the war stays in their memory for most of the starting chapters and not forgotten willy-nilly. 2. Probably could clarify, who is the person in the carriage, are you writing the start of the story not from the main character for...

Mostly just from the earlier vibes, the pushing of him somehow "falling" into ~success~

Nice start, I'm not sure what you re-wrote but here are some thoughts. 1. A bit of a logic leap with Patrich knowing what "Pangea" and "Aldrich" in his internal monologue before anyone told him where he is. A possible fix: Have the Priestess or the King explicitly name the land during their...

Does anyone know the operating procedures for an FIM-92 Stinger missile to fire at a low flying dragon?

Hi, Currently working on a new standard fantasy story written in first person. I'm torn on whether the synopsis should match the book POV or do an "epic" third person summary. What summaries do people like? *Also, I can't seem to get a higher reader count or reach trending is it because I...