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I got that. I think the way I said it was wrong. I understood it was a tactical battle, but for me(personal opinion), for such a powerful fight, the injuries were mild. That's all.

The fight itself was excellent. I don't know if this is proper advice or just some stupid thing only I am doing, but the damage seems lacking. When Clara wins the battle, Erna's injuries aren't mentioned at all. The other thing bothering me is the repetition of the word "woman". It is used more...

Ic. Thanks man. I'll do from next time. Have a nice day.

I have a novel I'm still writing. Haven't gotten to publishing it yet, but I do have a stock of chapters. If I send them here, could I participate in this? I totally understand if ur not willing to read it like this. Hopefully its worth ur time. Have a nice day.

Hey Tempokai, remember me?(of course not, this is an alt acc). I was one of the first novels u checked(and prolly the one that was roasted the most. It's still here, on page 1.) Remember telling smth about being stuck in a forest of mid and having to either continue that or burn everything down...