How anticlimactic.
This is unlike you, where is the roast? Are we feeling uninspired today?
The mc is only a bit insane. That's a dealbreaker to me. Insanity have no limits. As a Malkavian, I'd know.
Make the mc crazy crazy. Don't hold back.
Better? That's very vague. Tell me what you want to improve. Formatting? The prose? Structure? Or do you want others to point out which aspect from your story are the weakest?
It's alright, no one will send you to Gulag over irregular grammar. Even Gemoy won't do that. You're safe.
Just don't...
Understandable. But what about the friends you made along the way? Friends you won't met if you never start writing? It's not for nothing.
We're here for you if you need someone to talk to.