Search results

That's a lot of information in one chapter. Nothing wrong with that, just don't expect your readers remember all of those. I'd suggest you to separate mc's past and world building into several chapters, but that's up to you. This paragraph is too long. Either chop them into several paragraphs...

Your writing is very good, so I can't say anything bad about that. But I feel like there's almost nothing important happening in your story so far. I know there are some foreshadowings here and there, but still, I want to see the mc meets the organization as quickly as possible! That's what I...

As a reader, if you encounter a latin or french word while reading a non-isekai novel that isn't based on this earth, will your immersion be broken? Especially in monologues or dialogues.

Achieving roughly 1-2k views in one day.

I've read the story until chapter 25. The premise is unique and refreshing; it's rare to see a story of a baby raised by a spider and the mc is not reincarnated and/or having op ability right at start. As for grammar, I didn't encounter any glaring problem (maybe because I'm not a native...

xXx: Return of Xander Cage (2017)

It is already readable and the usage of tense is proper AFAIK. There are few lines that can be improved. The sunlight penetrates the curtained window of the classroom. I gradually regain my consciousness and raise my head away from my crossed arms. I impulsively avert my eyes from the...

Second one. I personally dislike one sentence paragraphs in the first one.

I know some people here don't want to post on forum (or on this particular sub-forum). So I set up a poll. Please choose at least one if you have read the story. Alternatively, just comment on this thread. That's all and thank you in advance.

Old image for my old novel. I want to edit it but I lost the file...

TLoPT: give the mc a lifetime goal so the story doesn't seem like it's going nowhere. I suggest you must add it as soon as possible. And maybe you should skip every travelling scene (or even the haggling scene) when there's nothing important happened. Magic Endeavour: I like the premise quite a...

Well, I've read all the chapters. I'll just cover your writing style first. Here's what I think you should do: 1. Don't summarize your mc's motivation. For example, try to write directly the scene when his grandpa died instead of leaving a long message that nobody can really remember even the...