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The synopsis was well defined, i have no criticism on that.

But, it was exactly that description that made me expect some action in the first chapter. I mean, about the blessed and the cursed.

But it started with someone telling a tale about some family. That killed my curiosity.

Second, When introducing new characters, especially more than one at once, you should start with the background, physical features, and something to clarify how many people are there.

Eg. A man was telling some kids a story about a new family in their town. If you had started the description like this : In a garden filled with flowering plants of all colors.....(the background), A large, muscular man with blonde hair (physical features), sat on the floor, surrounded by five kids.....

Something like that will let me create an image in my head, and flow easily with your narration.

If you compared what I said with what you wrote, I'm sure you'll find the flaws yourself.
It's not bad, but first impression should be hooking and filled with curiosity.

But in your five chapters, it was filled with people talking with each other— no real action relating to your synopsis.

The fifth chapter happened to show what you should have put first, I mean about the kid awakening his cursed blessing.