Blood of the First House – Dark Gothic Horror / Genetic Apocalypse

Blood of the First House – A Dark Speculative Novel (Mature Content)

Hello! I’m a new writer sharing my first novel, Blood of the First House. It’s a dark, mature story that blends gothic horror, genetic engineering, and apocalyptic revenge.

House Ashford has hidden for centuries—a dynasty built on incest, genetic engineering, and absolute control. When the heir discovers she is dying from a defect that should have been bred out, she will sacrifice anyone to survive. Five survivors have hunted her for decades. Their revenge will shatter the bloodline—and unleash something far worse.

Horror, Dark Fantasy, Genetic Engineering, Revenge, Apocalyptic, Mature

I’ve just started posting chapters and would love any feedback. Please check it out if the premise interests you.
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2260810/blood-of-the-first-house/

aight, let me be your first reader.

thanks bro
please tell if improvement is needed

Your first chapter scared me.

I clicked and was immediately greeted by a a skin colored sack with veins on the corner right of my screen.

Yes, I know you wrote pendant but that image of it just dangling at the side with a chain.




Edit :

ok noted

is it good

eagle_360 said:

Your first chapter scared me.

I clicked and was immediately greeted by a a skin colored sack with veins on the corner right of my screen.

Yes, I know you wrote pendant but that image of it just dangling at the side with a chain.

Edit :

Spoiler: Item in question

Change color and veiny of the pendent if possible

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Oh dont mind her, there's a reason why she love to wear tight leather suit.

Anyway, I just gave your story a quick read.

It's good! slowburn goodie stuff!
The way you write, your prose are nice.

You delivered the eerie mystery vibes well.

Yes, i personally love that you put some artworks inside. I'm the type who love visuals to help my immersion

Can't say anything about the story because, yes yours is a slowburn, nothing much revealed at early chapters.
But judging by the way you treat it, you have my confident.

Just keep your research about how the society works at that era, its important for your detail.

I'm sorry i cannot read more, as i'm... writing comedy right now. There's some kind of vibes that i need to keep in my inner self.

Keep on writing! you will reap readers after 50 chapters++

Toodle–do

thanks so much for checking it out – even just a quick look means a lot.

Glad you liked the vibe and the prose. Slowburn is definitely my thing, so it's awesome that it worked for you.

And yeah, I'm a sucker for visuals too. Art just adds something, right?

No worries at all about not reading more. Comedy and dark mystery don't exactly mix – you gotta stay in your zone. Totally get it.

I'll keep digging into the history stuff for sure.

Good luck with your comedy writing! Hope it's going great.