Hi, posting Ultraviolence here, and I don't got too much feedback from it so far. Would love to see more! If you want.
ULTRAVIOLENCE
Justice. Pain. Sins. Revenge. We all in our hearts have this sense of justice. The feeling of getting “even” in this world. An eye for an eye. We cheer on the man defending his home by shooting the man who wanted his TV dead. We love our revenge stories. Someone...www.scribblehub.com
It's working. More people actually read the story now because of the drama. Dramas are good for exposure!
I DONT WANT THAT THO LMAO
Thank you! The first chapter is a bit heavy-handed, maybe because I wanted to explain who Jackie is in a calm setting like therapy. Maybe I can rewrite it later!Alright, I read over a bit and I also will say that there's a number of comments in this thread that already point out what I saw. But I'll suggest something else: imply what Jackie is feeling, don't explain it. The reason is because we want to relate with characters we read. If the character simply tells us what they felt, then all we have is a label. But if we hear implications, then some of us can tap into those senses from our own experiences and become aware of what that might mean. With context, we can be smart enough to figure out what's going on, okay?
I got fans following me to see my downfall many many men
No wonder some people think it's AI. AI don't know moderation it overuses them a lot.
Google docs and here kinda makes formatting here weird. I'd tried to clean it up in editing, with too many spaces n all that. The rest, sure. I understand where you're coming from. But I promise it isn't a revenge story. Not in a typical sense anyway. Thank you for your feedback!
People want me to be this hurt little snow flake but I am chilling bro lmao. I am getting DM'd rn of people picking apart my work. I went to college where people said worse to my face! I just don't like being accused of something I didn't do. I think that's normal, no?
That's normal. But like Eldoria said in the other thread, you need to work on your conversational skills so you can explain your thoughts better without sounding antagonistic. It will make the stories you write more enjoyable to read too because the way an author talk reflect the way they narrates in the story.
I don't insult anybody. I've been called entitled, hostile, etc, yet I don't call anyone out their name. I only match energies. I'm nice if you talk to me nice. I'm not just gonna take the catty remarks and disrespect without say something back. Eldoria needs to listen to their own advice. This isn't hostile, I don't think
This less than a day after you made a thread commanding a bunch of hobby authors to spend hundreds or thousands of dollars on cover art because you don't like AI.
If all you did was match energies, then you are talking at the wrong place. SHF is a wild place. One doesn't simply come here for positive vibes. At least it's not as bad as RR.
You don't care that someone is calling you out for trying to victimize yourself after lying about your own behavior? Yeah, that tracks.
As you can see I love to rub in some mud lol. I'm chillin tho!
I'm glad you are enjoying this as much as us. AI accusations are inevitable. They will come, like it or not. You get your first time from me, isn't that cute?
You have been very polite and reasonable. I am disappointed. Must be Eldoria's influence. Try to be ruder next time. Where is the Macha I know?
I can't control how others respond to me, but I can control how I respond to others.
Character development is real. This is your fault, Eldoria. You fixed her. Now you have to take responsibility.
