Before I dive into editing, I’d really appreciate any feedback on my story.

I’m a new author and plan to revise my story before moving forward. I’m open to honest feedback, so feel free to be blunt. Fellow writers, I’d especially appreciate advice on how to improve any issues you notice. The title and cover will be updated as well. {15 day time period.}

Area of advice-
1. Dialogue whether it feel natural or forced.
2. Prose & Style
3. Character craft.

Tell us what you plan on revising. Why do you want to revise it? What are you struggling with?

This just feels like a "Read my story" post without any real merit. Give us more details so we can answer your questions and maybe address your doubts.

Crimsonsake said:

I’m a new author and plan to revise my story before moving forward. I’m open to honest feedback, so feel free to be blunt. Fellow writers, I’d especially appreciate advice on how to improve any issues you notice. The title and cover will be updated as well. {15 day time period.}

The Twin-Bound Ascension [Isekai | Progression Fantasy]

A paralyzed kid gets sacrificed by cultists. Instead of dying, he wakes up in a dungeon—with a body that actually works. Aelric spent a year trapped in his own body, unable to move, unable to speak. Then some robed lunatics decided he'd make a great demon sacrifice. They sealed...

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This is the wrong area regardless - if you're looking for specific advice, you should go to the Tips and Advice area (second one under Authors). If you just want general feedback, post to the Story Feedback area (third in the Authors section)