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Feel free to share your own stories of ghosts, demons and aliens. Here's my story. Written on my phone, with my lil thumbs. So dont...

Choppy cinematic styles are good for actions and high adrenaline tense situations. For others, not so much.

Today on "Barely Disguised Author's Fetish"...

Thank you Eldoria, I appreciate your feedback! I'll focus on removing the choppy feel of the scene first... emotions are daunting.

Narrating emotions in a varied way is one of the advanced skills in showing. It's quite complex because the author needs to understand...

I have to admit what you said makes sense but I'm having trouble wrapping my head around it. I'm just breaking down my thoughts. So his...

The problem isn't your sentence structure, but rather the narrator's voice. The way the information is conveyed is more...

I heard by rumor that instructional books, while rare, are allowed on SH, but I cannot find any forum info that says so. Wanted to check...

Thanks for your feedback! My train of thought on those narrator's voices were to try and showcase Aren's thoughts/feeling according to...

Dude... I'll be honest with you. Your chapter feels like a choppy cinematic film. As a reader, I had no trouble imagining the scenes in...

I haven't read alot of the farmer oriented litrpg's but it does seem cliche, which isn't exactly wrong and caters to the people looking...

Hi, I'm looking for feedback on my latest chapter. Not on the plot/characters but more on the text itself, pacing (Scene-Summary) and if...

Winning currently am I.

i see this all as a solution in search of a problem. I mean, tell me how WACKY this sounds. Writer's write, editors edit. Publishers...

Playing devil advocates here but LLM can be a solution to some of those problems. Maybe not the ones currently in use but definitely in...