Recent content by tanaka2687

Trust me, I understand your point and I have watched the Kirby anime. I just don't see that he is acting particularly childish or that the character is intended for children. I do take the point on board, though and it seems that I will have to tweak his character to make him come across a...

I understand your point here. Personally, I think that the exchange gives Hiro some character and him acting in a way to a typical shounen protagonist is a good thing. I actually quite like the exchange but I understand that it won't be everybody's cup of tea. I had him act this way because of...

Hi. Thanks for the chapter by chapter/ scene by scene breakdown. What I take from what you have written is that you don't like the story very much. That's fine. I think the biggest criticism I can take from this is that you think the story is: 1. Too generic and similar to other, better...

Hi. Trying to get some more views on my story so would appreciate any feedback. Or people just taking a look really. Hope it's to your tastes. The story is inspired by adventure manga and anime, in particular One Piece. Link is in the picture and synopsis below. Ta. Synopsis: Explorer. This...