Recent content by smartpants6

Thank you so much for your feedback! ? It really helps. I'm glad the twisted feeling is also hitting very well. You're to say it's what I wanted. However, yeah, I still have to revise the first chapter even though it really is good for building the suspense and feeling in the second. Perhaps I...

Here you go

Sure, give it a go for mine :s_wink:

Hey, will anyone reply? :giggle: Just reading a few chapters and giving feedback would be great

Sounds legit

As a fellow horror smut author and a gentleman myself, I would love to review your writing! Here are my thoughts: Prologue: The word "musings" makes me feel the character is educated; I suppose it's a well-know word, but you get what I mean. I can really feel the rant with the long sentences...

I'm confused. What exactly are you implying? I didn't really get your point. Do you think ThatCoolGuy is me? And because they left a negative review on your page about it being AI or something? It wasn't me if that's what you're asking. It looks, tbh, like some troll saw this forum thread full...

Sure, buddy! Here are my thoughts :s_smile: Prologue This is an action scene so maybe make the sentences shorter, more abrupt, and descriptive to carry the tone of urgency. For example, instead of saying "Fresh blood dripped from her sword, evidence of the creatures she had fought off ...", you...

So you have been using AI? There was literally express spoken consent in the writing; the character Margot literally asked Nate if he wanted her to beg for it. When someone is literally asking if you want them to beg for it, I don't really see how that's not a moment of clear consent or...

Well, if that's really the case I do apologize. Fair point about the voice. However, I am not trying to attack you here, but there's just one thing I would like to clear up because I don't fully understand your perspective and if you really did review honestly I would like to be respectful and...

Your reply shows up as AI too: https://app.gptzero.me/documents/8a3ca498-2071-4c6b-be8f-05fa6fb9a23a/share Also, I was able to detect it was AI before I even put it into GPTZero to confirm, so I don't really think it matters if there are false positives when your review had all the signs of...

I'm deeply disappointed by this review.... They didn't even really review anything... They didn't even read it. They just used AI. They didn't read anything and then they just used AI to read my work and write the review...

Yeah, I agree with Worthy39. Here are my thoughts for the first 10 chapters: Ch1 The first scene is actually pretty raw and exciting (even if a little cheesy), but then there's this tonal whiplash out of that scene that seems way too abrupt and disorients me. That thing about keeping secrets...

Oh thank you so much for passing it along! I actually have an anxiety disorder myself, so I totally understand you :giggle: (I guess you could say I have a strong skeptic's mind and so horror helps me distract myself from my anxieties.)

Could you critique my first chapter and maybe offer some ideas? I feel like I need to revise it but I'm not yet sure how. Thanks! https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1780737/reyouth/