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This is nobledark, or rather, grim's fairy tale. A dark fantasy seen from a child's perspective.

I feel like she's around four or five years old... let's make her four and a half. Reason I say that is because of her being old enough...

Oh shit, what i understand about this, is it some kind of grimdark fantasy? The way she describe the 'Mr.Dog' dancing after her mom...

Well, if what I provided is correct Long lines like these can be divided and shortened to give her a more childlike personality. Like--...

Her actual age is a secret. But the age range you provided is correct.

What is her exact age? Because a few lines(very few) feel a little mechanical for her age(since the whole chapter is in her pov).

Thank for your feedback. Caelan is indeed a little girl (not a reincarnated immortal). I asked her age to gauge how accurately Caelan's...

1. I feel like Caelan El Rose is around 5-9 years old, unless she is some weird immortal being that is trapped in eternal youth. 2. I...

Hello! Keep in mind, I'm not a very good writer, so take any of my advice with a bag of salt. With that out of the way: Just ditch the...

Feedback for A Little Daughter Character Well, I rewrote one of my chapters with the first POV from a little girl's perspective. Here...

New challengers approach!

There are actually many criticisms I could make. But now I disike to burden authors with too many demands. I prefer to suggest the most...

Okay, is that the only problem you found? Or do I have to fix something else too? Thanks for replying.

As someone said, my chapter 1 sucked. It had a soulless MC. My synopsis was also misleading. So, I've revised it and rewritten my...

Dude... after reading chapter 1 once, I noticed your narrative has a sudden POV shift problem that makes it prone to head hopping...