Recent content by Nihlith

I like it. I'd just go over it a couple times, add, subtract, reorder etc.. I played with it a little bit. I'm not sure if this is better, but again, that's what I'd do. This looks like the beginning of a scene because its new to me. If that's true, Aegis looks like the POV character here. It...

Depends mostly on how interested the journey is. If the story is about how they get there, then you want to write about that. If the journey is not a big part of the story, describe it in passing. A sentence can do a lot of heavy lifting for you if you don't want to focus on traveling. That's...