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LLenosaul reacted to Ellie_in_Pink's post in the thread Soverein Believers (Dark and Urban Fantasy/Philosophical Fiction) with
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Starting at the beginning. I never like to start off with negative feedback. But I do focus on it because that's how we improve. So let... -
LLenosaul reacted to Eldoria's post in the thread Soverein Believers (Dark and Urban Fantasy/Philosophical Fiction) with Like.
The OP is actually trying to convey the character's emotions through subtle emotion, using dialogue and body language (showing). That's...
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LLenosaul reacted to Ellie_in_Pink's post in the thread Soverein Believers (Dark and Urban Fantasy/Philosophical Fiction) with Like.
I agree. I suppose the more concise way to phrase what I was saying was that the OP needs to show *more*. I do see that the effort was...
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LLenosaul reacted to Eldoria's post in the thread Soverein Believers (Dark and Urban Fantasy/Philosophical Fiction) with Like.
Dude/sis... sorry, I stopped reading here. The reason? This is a moral lecture. Opening a scene with a moral lecture is the last option...
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LLenosaul replied to the thread Soverein Believers (Dark and Urban Fantasy/Philosophical Fiction).Thanks for the feedback. Thank you everyone for your feedback. I really appreciate it and will adjust my story accordingly. It’s nice to...
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LLenosaul posted the thread Soverein Believers (Dark and Urban Fantasy/Philosophical Fiction) in Story Feedback.Hey guys! Here’s a link to my story: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2240492/sovereign-believers/ I wanted some feedback on my first...
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