Recent content by HotConsensualSalt

I predicted it would be a genre/topic, mismatch. Thank you for giving it a read and providing feedback regardless. It's difficult to get any style feedback especially when writing erotica

This is the better version. Good shit.

The male lead in My Hot Dark Love Story is the closest thing I'll get to a fictionalized self insert, since the story was inspired by a joke between my wife and I. She joked about being more of a villain than i am, and since we both love American comics I imagined what kind of supervillain...

In recent fiction, OP heroes frequently indicate a power fantasy story where a cool guy does cool things. The author doesn't seem to care about conflict, or their idea of conflict still lacks any tension or stakes. I can't find anything interesting in that kind of story Light novels, isekai...

I keep one as my active story, with another 1-3 seeing limited updates. Those back burner stories are collecting ideas and plot twists and being refined in my notes while i write the main story. Which one is "main" varies. After i finish arc 1 of Beat, Prey, Love (estimated at 75k words) I...

"Everyone is default (white) except for this one BLACK guy" is a pet peeve of mine.

The prologue is very weak. It centers a character you don't name and is told from the POV of a similarly unnamed character. You just call the important character "him." How does the speaker know that this "him" has endured years of pain? Why do we need to know his hand is fingernailed? Don't all...

Ragebait used to be believable. "But things like anime and games are not art. They are like products which only need to satisfy the wants of the customers" is one of those foundational, first concepts you should state at the beginning. Cause that's so left field, so far from common knowledge or...

Thank you. I get caught between "knowing what I want to write" and "doing so in a clear, effective way the entertains and engages readers." Like, it's great that I know what I want to write, but I want to improve my ability to tell stories that enthrall or arouse or excite. And none of that...

I've got a unique voice and occupy a set of intersections that no one else does. I'm a jack of all trades IRL with an eclectic set of interests, inspirations, and experiences across different mediums. No one else was going to write what I am, and I couldn't find anyone close enough to doing so...

My family knows I write, but we're not close in general. I've sent them some of my SFW stories. Most of my fam don't read fiction, including mine. My current stories are erotica and romance, so I've declined to specify what I'm working on these days. DADT. When I go back to Sci-Fantasy or...

Touché. Frankly, "ScribbleHub's foremost sex gauntlet/kumite expert" is a title I'd wear proudly :ROFLMAO: .

Would 5 straight people in a fivesome still count as group sex? At that point it's a kumite. That's a sex gauntlet.

Sounds like someone is about to get flanked, and a few people are about to roll with disadvantage.

Don't lose hope. What you're describing is normal. I must warn you that if you wneed frequent, positive feedback, you've picked the wrong hobby entirely. Go do anything else. Writing is vulnerable, and lonely, and after you're done you still can't be certain if anyone will care. It's scary and...