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No, you didn't sound hostile; it just felt like my responsibility as a person asking for a review to provide everything beforehand. -
I really hope I didn't sound that dang hostile based on your reply seeming almost forlorn. I know having something broken down can hit...
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It is kind of like transmigration from LotM, but not exactly. where characters(Aegis in this chapter) know what happened in Deron's...
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I think the main issue for me was pacing. The opening blackout scene has a strong hook, but it feels a little too extended before the...
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Eldoria replied to the thread I wrote a identity confusion chapter?.I felt like Deron was awkward at the beginning of the chapter. He was portrayed identity confusion (amnesia, perhaps?). But midway...
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Eldoria replied to the thread Need a feedback on the epilogue..Dude, honestly... I'm having a hard time visualizing your scenes. Your narrative is full of verbs piled up in a compound sentence...
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Eldoria reacted to Sosin's post in the thread Looking for thoughts on my wholesome slow-burn romcom with body-swapping with
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I'm mostly looking for people who are into this kind of story (slow-burn romcom) to share their thoughts, since I don't know anyone else... -
Good day to you all. I need to know if the epilogue is readable (in terms of grammar), if there are enough descriptions, and if the...
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Eldoria reacted to blackcrowcrowd's post in the thread Targeted Story Feedback Thread (READ THE NOTE) with Like.
Alright~ wait for a while
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Eldoria reacted to K_Nishi's post in the thread Looking for feedback on Chapters 1–3 of HELL’S RETURNERS with Love.
Thank you very much for taking the time to read my work and for providing such thoughtful feedback. Your comments about the parts I...
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Eldoria replied to the thread Looking for thoughts on my wholesome slow-burn romcom with body-swapping.Honestly... I'm confused by your question. What kind of feedback are you looking for? If you're looking for feedback on taste, whether...
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Eldoria replied to the thread How quickly do you lose track of time?.Use timelines of the series:
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Eldoria reacted to MFontana's post in the thread Editorial Critique Requests [CLOSED (to further submissions)] with Like.
So the backlog doesn't build up overwhelmingly, this thread is temporarily closed to further submissions.
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Eldoria replied to the thread Looking for feedback on Chapters 1–3 of HELL’S RETURNERS.Dude, I’ve read the first three chapters. And I’ll say this honestly… sorry, but your narration is still vague, which makes the scenes...
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Eldoria reacted to articarson's post in the thread Feedback for my novel "Hyoren Enjo Journey on Another World". And how should i proceed with chapter length. with Like.
yeah thanks for the feedback. i will still write mostly a bit long chapter. but maybe not 10k+ chapter unless it was really necessary. i...