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This is definitely not the final version.

If you need to ask... I'll trust the readers and let them decide how I would finish that sentence.

It is illegal to be written like you do with adults. Check out the laws involving that to avoid getting in trouble.

Descriptions of the act itself: no go Mentioning the act has happened and connoted as a crime: yes readers can perfectly fine fill in...

I wouldn't describe the act itself or the actions that happened. I want to refer to the fact that it happened through vague physical...

If the paladin didn't exist, my MC would have always been a slave.

Is hinting or including a scene where it is implied that a child has gone through it or is going through it too much? I am writing a...

stated the laws and a few things that are important to the story. Inanitas is the domain of Vorax and one of the systematic domains of...

Just stated the sections and a few things about the city. You want me to add anything specific?

Inanitas is the domain of Vorax and one of the systematic domains of Abaddon. Theme - A city built on greed. The pitt is one of the...

Thank you for reading. This is actually helpful. Time to re-write. :)

Well, if what I provided is correct Long lines like these can be divided and shortened to give her a more childlike personality. Like--...

What is her exact age? Because a few lines(very few) feel a little mechanical for her age(since the whole chapter is in her pov).

Thank you for reading.

A nice piece of action with a little thriller, but not scary. Though this might just be me. Imo the 'horror' comes from the unknown and...