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I know that, but it kind of reads like it, given what was on there. I’m just telling you the vibes I got from it. It’s your job as a...

Mmm, this is what i understand about the scene : The shadow lunged toward Aegis, a cold prickle of dread crawling under his skin. He...

True, this is easier to understand.

Aegis is just a boy; meanwhile, the stranger is old enough to be his father. 😐 It is not a BL. The shadow in front of him lunged. Aegis...

Avoid any and all expository or info dump and have them interact with one another naturally. Let your audience infer from there. Here's...

My bad i should've mentioned that it is from a different character's pov that didn't see what happened. It was at the tail end of a...

changed the font size too.

Opinion?

I think i'll just edit few things and see if it is clear.

A dark themed harry poter academy set in a warhammer-esque( only the iron blood city ) world? Count me in

Well, in a way. The world is very harsh as the people of said world encourage violence and control as everyone in the world is trying...

I want to know if this particular block felt good or bad, i would appreciate if you can state your reasons. The shadow in front of him...

Is your world set in grimdark? Because the terms like "grooming" sound mature.

I meant the academy part only, rest all is different.

oh you took a look at the prologue. I was confused for a minute. I probably have to re-edit prologue. I've only written as a sneak peak...