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Yes, more or less like that. Insert descriptions within the actions. But don't overdo it; just include one or two character traits per...

Immaterial? it perfectly summarizes what i wanted to convey! Damn you are good at this.

I agree with most of what @Eldoria has to say. You can cut that description down quite a bit. For example: A draconic berserker, whose...

So i should explain the appearance through actions, is that right? Like action -> effect, action -> effect. What did you feel about the...

I have revised my 3 chapters with the feedbacks i got. Mainly about the sentence structure and how each sentence was carried on to a new...

There is no strict format for my feedback, but here is my general approach: I read your synopsis, then I read Chapter 1 until I stop...

Hey ?. i would appreciate your review on my work. Its a dark fantasy with in Aggressor's(demons) pov( not justifying them) i hope it...

Well, I only read 1 chapter of the prologue as a casual reader who happened to pass by. My general impression regarding the prologue...

Hey ?. i would appreciate your review on my work. I am a fairly new writer and i want to know if i am able to pull the reader into my...

Use yourself as a reference, and your friends too. If you can't, watch anime or series. If that takes too long, play visual novels. If...

DnD's Hell and it's structure, the whole Descent into Avernus was why i started writing this book. Even though i did not play DnD (i...

I played AD&D as a teenager. Had all the books, the dice, everything. Did DMing too, but I much preferred playing. Though I did enjoy...

Tiny addition to the advice others have given you. I find that communication in the majority of fiction is too clean. There are rarely...

Damn i didn't realize my story was a blend of dark fantasy/Litrpg till now.

Oh yeah fiends in my setting are little different than usual, best way I can describe them is their daily life includes the Archdevil...