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Hi! I read your prologue on the Scribble Hub and wanted to share a few thoughts. First, I personally really enjoy dark fantasy, so I’m...

Your prose is amazing btw. Breaking my rule because I love the people in this story. I kinda like everyone is so sex positive and...

So you think i should cut prologue section all together? or just prologue one? Because after reading your review i feel like i can show...

First, I want to echo what other folks have been saying. Putting every sentence on a new line is really not the way to go about things...

You can use italics for character thoughts (monologues). But... In practice, that theory is quite difficult to apply in web novels...

what about a character's thoughts? Should i just describe how they are feeling instead of writing their thoughts?

I'll give you a little immersive recipe based on my research... an immersive narrative is one that cleverly hides the narrator's voice...

Okay you are right, i did use those tags a lot.

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So you are saying that words like asked,said need to be used less? eh you can't be worse than my parents, hit me.

Noted, I'll keep this in mind while writing the next chapter. Also, what did you feel while reading it.

It feels really weird for me, yeah. Huge paragraphs aren't great to look at either, you're right. I find that the best length is about...

Paragraphs are essentially an idea isolated in the text from other ideas. Each new paragraph essentially resets the short term thinking...

Is it immersion breaking? Because i am new at this and previously when i started reading i felt huge paragraphs were little tiring.

If you include that weird scene in your story, my parents will spank me. I'm just a fussy little girl. :blob_teary: