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Welcome froren.

I feel like I’ve pretty much read most of your story based on how much of it you’ve posted in the forums. I’ll say that this is your...

Hey, thank you so much for reading. 😁 And yeah this is my most recent one, the one which I have written after revisiting my favorite...

I really hope I didn't sound that dang hostile based on your reply seeming almost forlorn. I know having something broken down can hit...

No, you didn't sound hostile; it just felt like my responsibility as a person asking for a review to provide everything beforehand.

Absolute satisfaction.✋🤚

Well, this is the reason why readers have difficulty focusing on your narrative. Because your narrative often shifts POV suddenly...

Yes, I messed up then; I didn't mention he was standing in front of the fence. I thought the info in the last chapter carried over to...

limited third, only his thoughts and what he knows is explained. But i believe i slipped into omniscient third in few places?

I like the tension you’re building with Aegis and the enforcers. You could just tweak the “personal bodyguards” line so it reads more...

I was, like, *just* about to say all that. But, she like, beat me to it and everything. seriously. I wouldn't lie about a thing like...

Definitely, because I think straightforward prose suits my world better. And you are right, I need to work on my white spaces issues...

I'll ignore your chapter excerpt. Analyzing prose is one of the most difficult challenges in fiction writing. Because you're not just...