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Thank you so much for taking the time to give such a detailed breakdown. As a writer who’s just starting out, feedback like this...

I tried to make the scene more emotional, but I think I stretched it too far. I’d like your feedback. Here is the chapter I did keep...

Glad to be of help. And just in case you weren't aware, the advice I gave is part of my own editing process as well, just tailored to...

Okay, that's better. I still don't like the NTR element in the prologue. However, if that's your artistic choice, I'll respect it. Other...

Firstly; El has a lot of great advice. Take it to heart. She's already covered most of it, narrative-wise, so I'll stick to the...

Alright I will rewrite the whole thing and try to incorporate all the points you and el listed. Appreciate you guys giving your time to...

First of all, Thank you — I appreciate the blunt, detailed feedback. I can see you put time into this, and I value the honesty. Your...

CHAPTER 0: PROLOGUE The steady beep of the heart monitor filled the hospital room, each sound sharp enough to carve itself into John’s...

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wow, you really gave me a scare there i thought i actually did something wrong

Thank you, and what do you mean i am stalking eldoria? I’m not stalking anyone. I only interact with stories and profiles in the normal...

John figured death was supposed to mean peace at last. His whole life got wrecked by heartbreak and betrayal and all that loss, so the...

Thank you so much for this ya I also felt like it was slow the first few chapters cause I didn't really know how to get into it, as for...

Thank you for pointing those out. I will definitely take into account your points, as for the feedback, anywhere is fine, put it...

Thanks for taking the time to look at it and give your real thoughts. I see what you are saying about all the isekai stuff out there; it...